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IELTS Task 1 - Changes in levels of exports in Southland in 2000, 2015, and prediction of 2025


Hettymsk 9 / 9 9  
May 24, 2015   #1
The bar chart illustrates changes in levels of main exports in Southland in 2000, 2015, and prediction of 2025 and is measured in billions of Pounds.

Overall, it can be seen that international tourism is the biggest contributor to exports income in three given periods of time, while meat products is the smallest contributor. The data are categorized by years and type of products.

In the beginning of periods, the international tourism was the highest contributor to main exports in Southland, contributed about £ 8.1 billion per year then increased to £ 8.9 billion in 2015 and predicted to experience an increase as much as £ 9.9 billion in the next ten years. It is also predicted to be the most contributing export income.

Whilst the dairy products started at £ 6.9 billion happened to increase dramatically to £ 99 billion in current year but it is predicted to drop slightly to £ 9.5 billion in 2025. Dairy products are the most contributed products to exports income in this year compared to international tourism and meat products.

Finally, meat products has been the least contributed to export income in the first given period which was only £ 6.0 billion per year and started to decline slowly at about £ 5.5 billion then again it is predicted to drop at the lowest of £ 5.0 billion in a decade.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
May 25, 2015   #2
- Finally, meat products has been the least contributedcontributor to export income in the first given period...

Hetty, this is yet another detailed analysis from top to bottom. Good job!

You were able to stick to the figures, made sure that detailed analysis is given and posted it in your article.

However, I have a few points;

- As always, proof read your article

- good job on correcting your unit of measurement and using them in your analysis

- smooth flow of the analysis

- paragraph phasing is also great, very professional

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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