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[TOEFL] The characteristics of NEIGHBORS - Specific details and examples


ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Aug 10, 2013   #1
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Neighbors can affect our lives in negative or positive ways. Neighbors can be our best friends or worst enemies. I think that having a good neighbor is truly a valuable gift. To me, some qualities of a good neighbor are to be helpful and caring. It's also good to have a sociable and outgoing one. It's very important to have a reliable neighbor, by the way.

One of the significant characteristics of a nice neighbor is to be helpful and caring. Most of us, whether we want it or we don't, may have to communicate with our neighbors someday. We and our neighbors may face common problems in our in common places of living or communities someday in the future. It would be great if our neighbors are caring and helpful regarding those problems. If we have neighbors who are indifferent and selfish, our problems may never be resolved and therefore we would have annoying lives and interactions with each other.

It's good to have neighbors who are sociable and outgoing and friendly. Neighbors with these qualities can make us have happier lives. We can become friends with them and spend our free times together. For example, we can hang out or travel with them or go picnic. This kind of neighbors can add more enjoyment to our lives.

A good neighbor should also be reliable. Reliability is a very important factor. We all need someone or a neighbor whom we can put our trust in him. For instance, if we live in an unsafe place and go away or travel for a long time, we may need someone to keep an eye on our houses and call us if something goes wrong with our places in our absence.

People may have different viewpoints about qualities of a good neighbor but I think that most of them
would rather have neighbors who are nice and helpful; people whom they can trust and are sociable and outgoing.
eden68 2 / 6 1  
Aug 10, 2013   #2
Most of us, whether we want it or we don't, may have to communicate with our neighbors someday. We and our neighbors may face common problems in our in common places of living or communities someday in the future. It would be great if our neighbors are caring and helpful regarding those problems.

I will write this instead.

There are many problems which we can face during our life and a good neighbor can help us to cope with the such difficulties.

Best,
moonname 6 / 14 2  
Aug 10, 2013   #3
It's good to have neighbors who are sociable, outgoing, and friendly
"Neighbors with these qualities can make us have happier lives" ... Maybe you can say: Neighbors of these qualities can make our life happier.

"... can add more enjoyment to our lives." ... Maybe you can say: ... can brought us enormous enjoyment.
"We all need someone or a neighbor whom we can put our trust in him." ... Maybe you can say: We all need a neighbor whom/ who we can trust.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 11, 2013   #4
Neighbors can affect our lives in negative or positive ways. Neighbors can be our best friends or worst enemies.

.... Both these sentences mean almost the same. Better do away with the first one. Second one provides a better hook.

To me, some qualities of a good neighbor are to be helpful and caring.

.... show more ease in saying this'
To me, a good neighbor should be helpful and caring.

It's also good to have a sociable and outgoing one. It's very important to have a reliable neighbor, by the way.

You better have all these characteristics in one line to avoid scattered effect.
OP ramshah 11 / 27 5  
Aug 11, 2013   #5
Thanks for the comment.
fuqiangang 3 / 7 3  
Aug 11, 2013   #6
" if we live in an unsafe place and go away or travel for a long time, we may need someone to keep an eye on our houses and call us if something goes wrong with our places in our absence."....Maybe you can say: "Another important aspect of being a good neighbor is to be vigilant.If people see a robber trying into your house,then your neighber call the police."I contend that it is more vigorous to prove your ideality.

Of course,your essay structure has brought out some issues.
1.I think your language should be more flexible
2I suggest you should avoide the repetition of your language.
3I deem you should make your expample more specific

In conclusion,you should alter these note that I mentioned.Once this process is complete,your the contents of essay can develop substantially!
fahadbd 25 / 56 5  
Aug 12, 2013   #7
Neighbors can be our best friends or worst enemies>>>>> you can say... they can either be our best friends or worst enemies
moonname 6 / 14 2  
Aug 12, 2013   #8
It' better to say:... they can be either our best friends or worst enemies
joyhu 9 / 22 5  
Aug 13, 2013   #9
I am a new user here, and I am not good in English.
So, I will be really sorry if I mislead you.
The basic problem that I found is that it is weird to have more than one "or/and" words in a sentence.
You can see them as a reference.
Wish you good luck. =)

we can hang out or travel with them or go picnic

we can hang out, travel around, go on a picnic, and so on.

It's good to have neighbors who are sociable and outgoing and friendly

It's good to have neighbors who are sociable, outgoing and friendly.


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