Ielts task 1. In chart: male and female, part-time and full-time education - ielts test exercise

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number of students analysis

As can be seen from the chart, there were huge differences between male and female, part-time and full-time education.
The disparity between two kinds of education remained unchanged through time. The number of people who chosen part-time education was much bigger than those picked full-time education.

Despite the unchanged sort of education, there were more and more women attending further education. From 1970 to 1990, the number of females who joined both kinds of education rose sharply. In 1990, there were even more women studying further education than men.

The number of men joining part-time education dropped in 1980, then slightly rose in 1990. After the 1970s, more males tended to choose full-time courses.
In general, it can be said that in the period of 1970 to 1990, females tended to study further education than they used to be, while the number of males attending classes remained constant or declined

It is difficult for me to judge the accuracy of your report or the relevance of your tone in relation to the target audience due to the missing instructions and lack of image reference. You cannot receive a complete renew due tothese missing elements.However, & shall they to review your work as best as I can.

The summary overview does not deliver an accurate representation of the original presentation. What kind of chart was shown? What is the title of the chart ? How is it relevant to the highlightable information ? What is the overall purpose of the presentation ? These are presented in a confusing manner in the first paragraph . There is a lack of clarity in the presentation. You appear to have rushed through the writing of that draft, failing to edit it for clear information presentation in the end.

Though you did your best to directly present the obvious information in the presentation,the lack of information analysis based on the data you found shows a lack of proper data cause and effect study in the report . More comparisons and extended discussions would have resulted in a longer essay, focused on data analysis and allowing for higher overall scoring possibilities. Never write just the minimum word count.Try to deliver at least 175 words to earn better presentation possibilities and higher sectional scoring considerations.

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