IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the UK

inquiries: in person, by letter/email, and by telephone

The line graph compares the number of inquiries for information in three different ways at a tourist centre in the United Kingdom in the first half of a year.

Overall, the number of requests for information at the UK tourist office by telephone and in person increased from January to June. At the same time, the figures for questions from letters or emails decreased.

In more detail, starting with 900 questions in January, the number of inquiries made by telephone increased to 1000 in March despite a fluctuation, remaining the most popular way to ask tourist questions throughout the period. Being the second most popular way to make requests in January with 800 requests, the figures for written questions witnessed a gradual decrease of 200 requests after 2 months. Meanwhile, made least at 400 requests, the number of direct requests doubled in March, exceeding requests via telephone.

From March to June, the number of requests by telephone to the tourist office continued to go up and reached its peak at 1600 in June, which was nearly twice as much as that of the initial start. Experiencing an opposite pattern, the figures for letters or electronic mail hit the bottom at about 400, being the least popular way of asking for information. It seemed that United Kingdom people continually made requests more and more in person, making the figures for face-to-face questions sharply rose to 1900 requests and surpassing all other mentioned figures.

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Rewrite this essay because you are definitely over the word count for the 20 minute writing time frame. You neglected to time yourself in terms of quality writing. The examiner will not look at the number of words you have written, he will look for your quick wit and ability to make yourself understood as clearly as possible within a short discussion presentation. This is not a task 2 essay. The word count maximum for this is 200 words. Overdiscussing is never a good idea in any task because it takes your focus away from the need to write a good essay as opposed to just writing to show off your vocabulary.


It is incorrect for you to make statements of fact in this case. You are being asked to analyze and report on the information, not come to a conclusion for the reader. Allow the reader to come to a conclusion of their own, without your influence or personal opinion being presented. That violates the writing rules for a task 1 essay.

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THE ESSAY
The line graph compares the number of inquiries for information in three different ways at the United Kingdom tourist office in the first half of the year.

Overall, while the number of requests sent to the tourist office by letter or email decreased, the figures for in-person and telephone requests increased throughout the period.

In more detail, there were nearly 800 written questions sent to the office in the United Kingdom in January. After 5 months, this number considerably drop to under 400 questions, which was half of the initial number. Going through an opposite trend, the figure for direct requests witnessed a significant rise from 425 requests (the lowest point of the three types of requests) in January to about 1900 requests in June, surpassing any other ways by the end of the period. Starting with 900 inquiries in January, the number of inquiries via calls also went up gradually and reached its peak at 1600 requests in June, despite a plummet to 800 in February.