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IELTS:Cheap air travel should be encouraged?



gnam6174 1 / 1  
Jul 22, 2013   #1
Topic: Many people think that cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people the freedom to travel further. However, others think that this leads to environmental problem, and so air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from having it. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In recent years, many airlines offer to their customers more and more number of cheap flights. People have various different views about cheap air travel. Although there are good arguments in favour of this trend should be encouraged, I personally think that cheap flight can make many serious problem.

It is undeniable that cheap air fares have broadened travel possibilities for many people, particularly for the lower income group. These days, millions of people can travel around the world for work or pleasure. They can develop their careers , broad their knowledge, and interact with many other people from varied cultural backgrounds. Moreover, travels also help to promote the tourist industry development, boost the economy and job markets of many countries.

On the other hand, growing of cheap flights really have negative impact on environment. Apparently, more flights could mean bigger and busier airport that may be grown the air pollution for people who live and work close to it. However, the biggest concern is the effect on global warming. Burning plane fluel can releases cacbon dioxit into environment that cause the Earth to heat up. In fact, while many efforts are being made to reduce CO2 emissions from cars and factories, nothing is being done to reins the airlines.

In conclusion, I would argue that the drawbacks of cheap air fares outweigh the benefits. However, It does not mean that air travel should be more expensive. Instead, people should be aware of their responsibility to reduce the emissions caused by their lifestyle choices.

Thanks for your help !

dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 22, 2013   #2
In recent years, many airlines offer to their customers more and more number of cheap flights.

In recent years, many airlines offered cheap fairs on flying.

People have various different views about cheap air travel. Although there are good arguments in favour of this trend should be encouraged,

.... Now you need to introduce the prompt more clearly;
However, people hold different views about this trend. Some believe cheap air travel should be encouraged to give ordinary people a chance of travelling. Others argue that it may create lots of environmental issues and therefore air travel should be made expensive in view of discouraging people to travel.
OP gnam6174 1 / 1  
Jul 23, 2013   #3
Thanks you for your feedback.
What do you think of my essay? Good or bad? Thank you.
dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 27, 2013   #4
I think you write well . Your writing is clear and well presented. There are small grammar issues here and there, but they are not major ones. :) Keep practicing... You can aim for a real good band :)

, broaden their knowledge

Moreover, travels also helpto promote the tourist industry development, boost the economy and job markets of many countries.

Moreover, traveling also helps promote tourism which contribute to boost the country's economy.


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