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Should children spend their free time on school work? IELTS


Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 10, 2013   #1
Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

There are people who perceive that children are having much more leisure hours as a whole in general and insisting to use those times to do work related to their studies. I agree with the view, it is however, the leisure hours can spend in a different ways, so that children able to realize their social responsibility and hidden potential.

Besides, academic curriculum, students should be encouraged to participate in building activities which will help them to understand the significance of unity. In addition, schools can initiate certain social awareness programs and engage student's volunteers to participate in order to simulate social awareness and their responsibility among entire student community. Apparently, these activities facilitate to lay better foundation for our future generation and in the same way utilizing their precious time in a fruitful manner.

Furthermore, children are capable of grasping the things in gallop. Eventually, encouraging children to learn extra-curricular activities such as dance, music and sports are the best feed for their free time. For example, countries like the United States, the United Kingdom, Australia, and China organized student sport community centers, in order to improve their sports skills which led them gain more medals in Olympics, common wealth games etc...

There are always be supporters and critiques for all new initiatives, but the fact remains that though academic education is essential thing for students for their better career path, social awareness and exceptional talent add fuel to shape their personality to reach lime light in our society. In my opinion, it is our responsibility to align the students towards above said activities and aid them to make use of their leisure period in a productive way.

joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 11, 2013   #2
hai..Arun...

Additional ideas...
:participating sorts enables them co-ordination of mind and body, keep them healthy, good sports man spirit...
In term sprts..
Co-operation, follow rules, ...
All these are necessary in future..
If free time is the mere extention of academics children may lose interest to studies
Dance, painting, mus....etc help them to express their ideas and can realice the talents
Relives children from monotonous studied , relaxation and with fresh mind they can concentrate more on studies...

I prepaired the essay on this topic but no way to post, because today's essay i posted already..):

Best of luck..

Tessy
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 11, 2013   #3
hi Tessy,
Thank you very much. waiting for tmrw. Planning to read old essay from now. Instead of writing. if you have any trip kindly let me know.

Arun
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 11, 2013   #4
Hai...

I dodn't want to make any talk in the forum..if you need drop your i.d here...
O.k..

Take care..
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 11, 2013   #5
I think we are discussing about IELTS exam preparation tips which will be helpful for everybody here in forum.

I too dont want to spoil this forum as other Social media like FB and respect forum which helping me alot.
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Jan 11, 2013   #6
Hai..

Sorry if anything, anyway i hurt you..
I was intented to sent you the 100 essays which i prepared ...just to read ...may be not all excellent..
Moreover, last two years essay and speaking questions...
I am not interested in any personal talks...
My friends know that...

it really hurt me to realize that you misunderstand me....(:

Bye...
Allthe best..
Tessy
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 11, 2013   #7
Hey Tessy,
It seems you have mistaken me. I am really sorry about it.
This may be due to my poor knowledge about conveying the things in English.
I was just trying to convince you that we are not talking anything other than studies
so that I thought you don't feel anything bad about our conversation.
Moreover I was really happy to gain good knowledgeable friends through this forum.
Especially you, Duminda and devaraj. you guys helped me a lot to gain confidence for my exam.

Really sorry about the things happened. if you want to reply to my notes please send it to aruna.manivannan@yahoo.co.in

Really I request you not to feel bad about my word. May I was wrongly convey the things with my poor English.
I hope you will understand what I am trying to say.

Take care. Thanks a lot for your guidance.

With sheer respect,
Arun
OP Arun0506 27 / 120 34  
Jan 11, 2013   #8
hi Tessy,
I think you are angry me still.
Just now strikes in my mind that my words make you to think that I hv mistaken you wrongly. Nothing like that. U all are in high respect in my mind. Just nw i go through ur comments in my old essay where you had asked for my id if i want more to reading. By that time i was understood.

if i keep posting abt our misunderstanding then i may disturb the main purpose of this forum. so plz take it easy. really i thought u got angry on me when i asked for tips and scolded me as strict person to not to entertain like this in forum. i was trying to convince

u by saying we are discussing abt ielts only.
i dont knw whether this notes make u understand what i mean.
anyway plz be cool sorry for hurting u.
if u feel better send me ur writing to my id given above.

i am sorry guys ...
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 11, 2013   #9
There are people who perceive that children are having much more leisure hours as a whole in general and insisting to use those times to do work related to their studies.

.... try to present the core idea without lengthening the sentence. It helps improve the clarity. Here your idea is to say that some believe children should spend their leisure time doing school work. Say it direct;

There are people who perceive that children should engage in activities that are related to school work during their leisure time.
You should have a strong and clear sentence for the opening line. You can take lots of help from the prompt, though you should not repeat it one to one. But there's no harm in taking its sense.

. I agree with the view, it is however, the leisure hours can spend in a different ways, so that children able to realize their social responsibility and hidden potential.

This is good, but reader tend to find out what these different ways are. So you need to tell the reader about them.

Besides, academic curriculum, students should be encouraged to participate inbuilding activities which will help them to understand the significance of unity.

....it should be "personality building"
You need to give a specific example for this reason. Talk about some program that helps them learn such life skills. Remember, it's important to give specific examples.

You write well :) Have confidence and do it. Remember your structure well and stick to that!
Good Luck!


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