Choice between academic qualifications vs personal experience and values, when hiring

Some say that is more important for employers to consider academic qualifications rather than personal experience and values when hiring an employee. Do you agree or disagree ?

What are positive and negative aspect of the issue?

It is vivid that educated and specialists persons are more attractive and suitable for employers than others. But, there is an issue that which academic competence or personal life style is more valuable for hiring an employee, as both have pros and cons. These advantages and drawbacks will be investigated before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.

On the one side, some crowds have all been the idea that the capability of employees should be valued by their academic qualifications when anointing them. They suppose that it could be provide a standard comparison between volunteers for the hiring. In addition, personal life understanding cannot measure in a form of short time interview. They believe if an individual has educational evidence, he/she would have its profession, immediately, and despite of that if a human has only a profession maybe she/he does not have its academic supplements.

On another side, there are some populations who mention the experience in the human life is more justice criterion than college certificates. In their opinion, in many cases the property situation plays the main role in gaining academic certification. Some people because of their financial situation cannot continue their education, despite of their capabilities, and it is far from humanity the employers ignore their skills and life experiences.

In addition, some humans have been educated only by force and do not have any proficiency in their fields of study.
To sum up, following the analysis of both points of view, as far as I am concerned maybe proficiency is more crucial to consider while hiring than academic qualification, because of its reliability.

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thanks.

I would reccomend you give more exapmles to defend your statements. That's what a persuasive essay is all about! Also don't use "on one side" "on another side", because its obvious you're trying to make points in the essay. Just go straight into it. Since you support hiring without academic qualifications you could also add more points like:

- some jobs require more life skills than academic
- can easily teach someone a job
- can be more reliable
- can put some statistics in like maybe that more people are likely to be hired with personal experience
*JUST MAKE SURE YOU CAN DEFEND YOUR POINTS*
Your negative and positive aspects sound good. Hoped this helped

is that you mean?
Students are faced with study delay as a result of financial situation

When you deal with essay, the first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read.

Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.

I see you try to vary your sentences by using synonyms, but you should remember not all synonyms have the exact meaning with the original ones. This affects your sentences roughly.


Comments:
1. This phrase adds no value. Better omit.
2. The word 'population' is inappropriate. Population = people living in a particular area. E.g India has a population more than 1 billion. Hence, you'd better use 'people'. Revised phrase: some people

3. The word 'mention' is inappropriate. Mention = to talk or write about something or someone, usually quickly and without saying very much or giving details. E.g Some of the problems were mentioned in his report. Revised phrase: argue/ claim

4. Experience in the human life is a complicated syntactic structure. Revised: a few areas of human experience
5. Write 'a degree certificate' instead of college certificates

Result:
Some people argue that a few areas of human experience are more important than a degree certificate