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Choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas or to focus on a single subject area?


StephenYoung 1 / -  
Feb 14, 2018   #1
Could you help me improve my script and make it sound more native? !

the hard decision which courses to pick



Choose to Take courses in a variety of subject areas or to focus on a single subject area

Since I am still a college student, I would prefer taking courses in a variety of subject area.You know, the reason I choose it is that most us students don't know what we like or what we are interested in, so we need to learn as much as possile until finding the area relly interested in and good at.

Like most people, they do jobs they don't like at all only for money or steady life, but they aren't happy.And I believe choose interest as our career would help us upgrade happiness level, so that's why I prefer taking course in variety area.

Could you please help me improve my script and make it sound more native? Thanks !
sam1982 4 / 12  
Feb 14, 2018   #2
Hi Stephen,

I am correcting certain spelling errors and sentence formation errors I am finding.

I would like to take courses in a vast variety of subject areas instead of limiting my exposure, as I am still a college student. The reason that I choose more variety of subjects, is due to the lack of knowledge in an area of interest and would like to gain to more exposure so I could narrow down to a subject subject area which I am really interested in and would like to explore further.

I believe a choice a subject is advantegous when you have keen interest in it, and it further aids in you career. I have seen people be unhappy with their jobs and are only following the path due to monetary benefits for a stable life.

Hope this Helps.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,529 3444  
Feb 15, 2018   #3
KevinLove, your English grammar is simple enough to warrant only a few minor corrections. You have 2 problems when it comes to your sentence construction problems. The problems are in relation to (1) time frame / tense usage and (2) connecting word issues. For example, when you use the word "variety" you are inferring that there are several items in the list. As you know, the minute you indicate more than 1 of an item, you need to use the plural reference for the subject. The correct reference would then be "variety of subject areas". Try to avoid word fillers such as "You know" because that is the first sign of non-native English speaker. A native English speaker always speaks in a direct manner, getting to the point sooner, rather than later. Since you are speaking in reference so something that has already happened (your being a college student at the moment), the appropriate action reference for "choose" should also be in the past hence "chose". Connecting words such as "and" are not used to open a new sentence because there is no prior thought or explanation to connect at that point. Connecting words are only used mid-sentence in order to connect 2 related thoughts in the presentation. Based on these advice that I have provided, you should be able to analyze the rest of your paragraphs, spot the mistakes, and correct them. Keep up with your English sentence structure exercises. You should be able to improve over time. I see the potential in your work.


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