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Classmate in schools can lead children to reach to progression and triumph



AMiNENGiNE 3 / 5  
Jan 24, 2012   #1
Classmates are more important influence than parents on a child's success in school. (Agree/Disagree).

Truth be told, successfully of students and children in schools has granted a lot of interest in our life. As a matter of fact, influence of classmates or parents on child has a dramatic effect on people's lives from all walks of life. In spite of the fact that we might not like to admit it, classmates are a more important influence than parents on child's success in schools, together with its genuine benefits, can create many a dramatic issue for parents. I agree with the following statement, and the major points that I will address in this essay for state my approval are: work-group and challenging.

First of all, students should learn how to do work-group in school and merge with each other that help them to work on exams and their projects. For example, when I want to work on an article or paper, I use my classmates to help me and get more ideas from them to finish my paper. So, if you need to success during your schools, you should learn how to match with other classmates and doing jobs as a group.

Secondly, one of the big targets at schools is reaching to top level and gets top 10% among the students that it prompt to create a challenge between students. Provided that students work together and use their classmates, this major will create among them. For instance, the exam entrance of university can make them to challenge with each other around their country to reach to high education and better future. As a result, being with other child and classmate can create a sense of challenge between them to getting achievement.

I have no illusion that my claims will be palatable to all. Indeed the most difficult part will be influence of classmates on children to success than parents. As the aforementioned examples show, I hope that this analysis can help to people that classmate and friend in schools can help children to reach to progression and triumph. But is this the whole story? What about good teacher to success?

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andymarie 2 / 11  
Jan 24, 2012   #2
I hope that this analysis can help to people that classmate and friend in schools can help children to reach to progression and triumph.<---rephrase.
Nayara 2 / 6  
Feb 1, 2012   #3
I'm not a native speaker English.
So, I'm not able to correct some grammar, spelling and so on.
But I think that you essay is pretty good. It's structure is good and you develop your
argument very well.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Feb 6, 2012   #4
Truth be told, the success of students and children in schools has granted a lot of interest in our lives.

I agree with the following statement, and the major points that I will address in this essay for stating my approval are: group work and challenging.

First of all, students should learn how to do group-work in school and merge with each other to help them to work on exams and their projects.

For example, when I want to work on an article or paper, I ask my classmates to help me and I get more ideas from them to finish my paper. So, if you need to have success during your schools , you should learn how to match with other classmates and doing jobs as a group.

I have no illusion that my claims will be palatable to all. Indeed the most difficult part will be to influence of classmates on children to have more success than parents.

:)
waldo01 6 / 19  
Feb 7, 2012   #5
i totally agree with what ur trying to prove but try rewording phrases like this one becuase it needs to be more clear :First of all, students should learn how to do work-group in school and merge with each other that help them to work on exams and their projects. For example, when I want to work on an article or paper, I use my classmates to help me and get more ideas from them to finish my paper. So, if you need to success during your schools, you should learn how to match with other classmates and doing jobs as a group.

Instead just put student should learn how to work cooperatively with other student in school and merge together in order to seek help on exam preparation and projects. Change this sentence and rework it differently: For example, when I want to work on an article or paper, I use my classmates to help me and get more ideas from them to finish my paper. So, if you need to success during your schools, you should learn how to match with other classmates and doing jobs as a group. Instead just say when i want help when working on an article i seek advise from my fellow classmates and this way it helps me improve my project because we work together as group. PLEASE HELP ME EDIT MINE :)


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