HI suxiaojung, here some corrections and suggestions from me:1.you have to read more about
appositive ,
eg :
Education, which is generally acknowledged, fulfills a crucial and indispensable function in the realm of the development of the students and the entire society.
usually, appositive is used to separate the definition by
commaif you want to make it become appositive, here my correction:
Education, generally acknowledged, fulfills a crucial and indispensable functions in all of students and society development.2. pay attention on
Noun singular and plura l
eg :
a variety of professional skills and techniques
you can change into
various professional skills and techniques3. there are so many which inside your essay
you can do
reducing to make your essay easily
eg :
courses which impart knowledge and information of laws and legislation should be arranged into the syllabus
courses imparting knowledge and information of laws and legislation should be arranged into the syllabus