Compare the data on a global scale - report

Information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

population and Global wealth

The bar graph highlights a population and Global wealth in 8 countries and is measured by percent. Overall, it is immensely clear that the Global wealth describes highest quantity in North America, while India has lowest quantity.

A closer look at, North America explains tallest proportion at Global wealth approximately 30,3%, whereas Global wealth is the lowest around by 2% in India. The second tallest is followed by Europe at 30%. Finally, it is occurred by Rich Asia-Pacefic about 23%. Thereafter, China and other Asia Pacefic show similar proportion at approximately 3%, it is slightly lower by Latin America and Caribean about 4%. At the end, India and Africa illustrate similar level approximately 1%.

On the other hand, China shows largest level at population about 24%, thereafter, other Asia Pacefic and India displaye alike level about 16% whilst Europe is different proportion by 1%. Africa and Latin America and Caribean are quite dissimilar by 2%. At the end, it is followed between North America and Rich Asia Pacefic that are slightly lower by 1% at population.

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Hasrina, I believe that you have written a very informative summary of the chart that was provided to you for this report. However, the opening summary is not as complete as it should be. The missing element in this opening statement would be the rundown of the countries involved in the study. You should have listed the names of the countries involved in the study at the start in order to create a solid discussion foundation and a complete overview of the information presented. The opening statement would have also been helped if you had presented the information in the opening statement in a manner that produced a minimum of 3 sentences which is the required element of this essay. Remember, it is always a minimum of 3 sentences, maximum of 5 for every paragraph. Those are the only weak points of your work that I saw. When it comes to information presentation, I do not believe that there are any faults and you did a solid job of informing the reader.

Well done! Here are some suggestions to improve:

At the endfinally , India and Africa ...
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