A comparison of alteration in means of transport in England between 1985 and 2000 by distance/person

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000

A comparison of alteration in means of transport in England between 1985 and 2000 according to average distance of person per year in miles is shown in the table. Overall, a huge number of inhabitants spent their furthest travel by car in both years while journey which used taxi was the shortest distance in 1985.

To begin with, transports which had car engine traveled 3705 miles in 1985. At that time, local bus trip was 429 miles, which was lower about six times than car. Meanwhile, other vehicles had journey not more than 55 miles. In 2000, taxi and local distance bus had a significant increase and car experienced the same. Taxi increased by 29 miles while local distance bus witnessed higher three times than it was in 1985. Lastly, local bus decreased to 274 miles in the latest year.

The rest of modes of travel had a short distance. People had walked not more than 260 miles in both years and bicycle declined slightly by 10 miles in 2000. Then, train and other transports traveled 239 and 450 miles respectively in 1985. In the next following period, those transports inclined by more than 100 miles.

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