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A comparison of lakeside between 2000 and 2009 is portrayed by using two illustrations.


faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
A comparison of lakeside between 2000 and 2009 is portrayed by using two illustrations. Overall, there were several changes that led the place into more modern city, that was represented by the appearance of facilities such as car park, offices, university, shopping center, and widening the size of Industrial area.

To begin with, started with the building in the northwest of the lake. In 2000, we can see derelict warehouse and old town besides the resident's area. Then, those two was demolished to construct parking area, new workplaces, and college in 2009. In addition, while the art center was converted to become cinema, the school and the housing in the top still similar in the both years. Moreover, shopping area was built in 2009, to replace the residential area in the previous nine years.

Next, we are going to the southeast of the river. It can be seen that residential area was disappeared in 2009 to broaden the Industrial complex. In contrast, the size of the water area was narrowed since the lake was changed solely into the pond.



mardian24 46 / 75  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
Hi faiz, let me give you some comments.

1. ... led the place into more modern city
On the grounds that there is no 'modern' word in the picture, you have to be careful for using your opinion

2. In 2000, we can see derelictderelic warehouse
As you can see on the question, the name of the house you mention is 'derelic warehouse

3. Then, those two waswere demolished to beconstructconstructed parking area.
Those two is plural and you write in passive form about parking area

Thank you
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