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Writing Task 1: Comparison between married and unmarried couple and the effect of children.



IvanMS027 43 / 28  
Oct 28, 2016   #1
The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The bar chart tells the information about the answer people gave about the satisfaction rates for married and unmarried couple in the United States and the children's effect on their parent's happiness. Overall, the level of the pleasure of married partner is two-fold than unmarried one except for older people and the present of children does not have a big effect on their family.

For the age having 18-64 age, the median percentage of contentment of happy people (43 percent) is almost double than unmarried one (21 percent). For older people, it can be seen that the married people tend to be happier for having 44 percent of satisfaction level than unmarried one which can only reach 34 percent of happiness. The data shows that the happiness rates for American are below than a half.

Children do not affect the happiness of the family. It can be seen that children under 18 only give 44 percent, while for children above 18, they only gave a slight increase by one percent. 43 percent is the happy percentage for a nuclear family without having any child. A small difference indicates that children will not affect the joy of married couple.


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faizunaa17 49 / 66  
Oct 28, 2016   #2
The bar chart tells the information about the answer people gave about the satisfaction rates ...

1. charts ---> plural. Because it has shown 2 charts not only one.

2. about .... about...
It's not effective. I think you'd better use the satisfaction, because the data already refer to people answer

3. For the age having 18-64 age
For the 18 - 64 age

untuk usia yang punya usia 18 - 64 ???

Children do not affect the happiness of the family

You can't state that, because there is still a difference between the children and no children. You just mention very little, or slightly, or other that means very small effect. Except you add word "tend to do not effect"--- and explain it because only small different.


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