IELTS TASK 1: The Consumer Dollar : Where it goes. (Pie Chart)

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The pie chart gives information about Americans' spending pattern in 11 broad categories.

It is obvious that food, drink & tobacco portioned the biggest amount of typical American expenditure, 23 cents per dollar. Dwellings and daily household expenses, each item accounted for 15%, transport and medical care made up 13% and 9% respectively. It is clear the mass of money been put in elements which are the most essential for an individual lives in modern society, total of these comprised a staggering weighting of one's earning, 3 quarters per dollar.

Personal welfare pursuing, clothes and jewelry as well as private business and foreign travel constitute 16% of total expenditure while only 2 % was invested on one's educational development. Religion, charity and personal care made up the remaining 3%.

It is assumed that the rising of living standard cause the personal well-being portioned certain ratio of an individual's total expenditure. Overall the given information does not depict any abnormal consuming behaviors.

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Good job ! I am not good in writing English, but I have a small comment. You have described some proportions and rates with each others (for example Personal welfare pursuing, clothes and jewelry as well as private business and foreign travel constitute 16% of total expenditure while only 2 % was invested on one's educational development. Religion, charity and personal care made up the remaining 3%) and you didn't write what is the conclusion of these rates. For example, you can say that "Personal welfare pursing become less important with respect to Food and Housing).

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Yahia