Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Although it is undeniable that these kinds of food are convenient, we should consider pertinently the other side of this issue. In my view, this convenience is just a short-term benefit. In long-term, its real effect on us is of a troubling problem.
At first sight{I can't find another}, foods which are easier to prepare have generated a big advantage. Cooking them save us a great amount of time, therefore we can do other important things.But in reality, potentially negative effect is still not considered properly.
The most remarkable effect is the gradual declining health of us.Firstly, canned and frozen food are taken as examples of easy-to-prepare foods. Canned food and frozen food are not as good for health as fresh food.It's because fresh food arrives at your table with its largely unchanged appearance, and its nutrients-including fiber content-intact.Meanwhile canned foods are notorious for being higher in added salt and sugar and frozen meals are known for the additives they often require. According to a recent New York Times article, using canned foods frequently leds to accumulation of preservative substance that caused more than 320000 people had cancer anually. Secondly, the thing using easy-to-prepare foods lead to the fact that people do not care much about cooking.The more that kind of food is used, the more people are bad at cooking. This brings about depending on canned food or frozen food. Of course the more people depend on this stuff, the more their health will be harmed.
To conclude, although convenience food has become more popular, it still can not improve the way we live. Therefore, no matter how the life is busy, it is necessary to cook fresh food as frequently as possible. Always remember that "health is worth more than gold!"
Thank you for correcting me.
How many marks would I get if this essay was on real TOEFL Test?
Hi,
I don't think that the word "while" can go right after "however". If I were you, I would reword it: "Although it is undeniable that these kinds of food are convenient, we should consider pertinently the other side of this issue"
"In my view, this convinience is just a short-term benefit" => "convenience"
"At first sight, foods those are easier to prepare have generated a big advantage" => "those" should be "which"
" That is those" => a grammatical mistake ( in my opinion)
"potentially nagetive affects" => negative
Actually, the sentences in this para ( the para "at first sight...") are quite wordy. You wrote about saving time in two sentences, so I saw the repetition here. How about "Cooking them save us a great amount of time, therefore we can do other important things"
"The most remarkable affect" => "effect"
"will be more declined" => "will decline". However, I think that using the noun phrase "the gradual declining health" as a subject is better.
"Firstly, to take canned food and frozen food as examples of kind of food that's easy to prepare" => I don't see the subject of this sentence. It should be: "Firstly, canned and frozen food are taken as examples of easy-to-prepare foods"
"Canned food and frozen food are not good for health as fresh food" => "...not as good for health as..."
"It's because fresh food arrives at your table with its appearance largely unchanged, and its nutrients-including fiber content-intact" => should be "... with its largely unchanged appearance and..." because you are using nouns after "with". But I don't see your point here.
"While canned foods are notorious for being higher in added salt and sugar, and frozen meals are known for the additives they often require" => there is no sentence structure " while + clause, and + clause". It should be "While +clause 1, clause 2" and these two clauses must have opposite meanings.
"leads to people do not care about cooking"=> I think that "lead to + a noun/ noun phrase" and if you want to put a clause after "lead to", the phrase "the fact that" will be required. In this case, I will write " leads to I- don't-care view on cooking" or "leads to the fact that people do not care much about cooking"
"...the more affect on their health" => "...the more their health will be harmed/ ruined/damaged"
"how easily we can prepare food" => "...convenience food" would be more specific
"it is necessary to prepare our food as well as possible" => "...to cook fresh food as frequently as possible"
Those things are some of my ideas on your piece of writing. Hope that they can help!
Cheers,
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Thank you so much, Thuong. I learn so much from your help.
By the way, I guess you come from Viet Nam? Is that right.
Here is my revised writing thanks to Thuong's help. Please give me advice, everybody.
Hi Enel,
yes, you are right! I'm from Vietnam
V = Valiant
I = Influential
E = Exciting
T = Trustworthy
N = Neat
A = Awesome
M = Mesmerizing
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have a nice day!
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However, while the fact that the easy food preparatio n likes that is convenient cannot be denied, its real influence on our life is an important issue that must be considered thoroughly .
At first sight, foods that are easier to prepare have generated a big advantage.
That advantage is that it helps us to save more and more time because we do not need much time to prepare.
But in reality, potentially neg etive effects are still not considered properly.
"effect" is a noun, and "affect" is a verb:
My help affects your essay.
I hope you enjoy the effects of my help.
The most remarkable effect is that our health will be more declined with every passing day.
...using canned foods frequently leads to accumulation of preservative substances that caused more than 320,000 people to develop cancer anually.
Secondly, the thing using food that's easy to prepare leads to people do not caring about cooking.
To conclude, despite how easily we can prepare food, it still cannot improve the way we live. Therefore, no matter how the busy life is, it is necessary to prepare our food as well as possible. Time may be like gold, but always remember that "health is worth more than gold!"
I like your username, MonkeyDDragon!!! I cannot score the essay, but above is my help.
I just wanted to point out, that the first thing that popped into my mind is, (since I volunteer for an historical museum) the methods of cooking. At the museum, in a 150-year old house, the only way of cooking food is in a fireplace (and even that wasn't used in the summer b/c it was too smoky/hot) which is really difficult! Most of the time they just cooked over an open fire. Consider the work it takes to chop the wood, wait for coals etc. Look up Dutch ovens! Cooking was much harder back then than it is today. Today we just flip a switch or press a button and viola!! Heat for cooking!
So I'm not sure if that helps... but that is my perspective.
i agree saira, but, in those days, women were staying home, cooking and raising kids. today, life is so busy for both, men and women. anyway...there are other ways to cook good and easy food and is not necessary to eat frozen dinners and canned food.
You might want to add a bit more to your essay. Really, you have only touched on a small portion of your topic. Okay, some canned and frozen foods are not as good for us as fresh food. But what about food cooked in a microwave? Microwaving really speeds up cooking, and is in some cases healthier. For instance, bacon is much better for you if cooked in a microwave than if cooked in a frying pan. The microwave really needs to be considered in your essay, because it is such a time-saver -- you can cook something in a microwave in half the time it would take to preheat an oven. And what about non-stick frying pans, electric food processors, blenders, etc? Not to mention the convenience of fridges and freezers, even for non-frozen dinners.
Also, this sort of essay sort of calls out for a cost benefit analysis. So, if you cook up a three course dinner using conventional means, and a regular meal using modern tools and equipment, what are the trade-offs? How much time do you save in the latter case? What, if anything, do you sacrifice in the way of healthiness? How much difference in quality is there? How do you judge whether the trade-offs make one approach to cooking better overall than another?
You have a deep look into this issue, Sean. You have got a lot of ideas. However, do you think that we can write about all those things in one essay? The arguments will be very strong if all are discussed ( microware, non-stick frying pans, the worth exchanges between time and quality, etc). But a long essay is required though.
You might have to leave some of the material out because of time limitations, but you should at least acknowledge that the topic is broader than canned foods and frozen dinners. The prompt specifically asks about the fact that food has become "easier to prepare," whereas the things you talk about are more ways of avoiding preparation rather than speeding it up.
Hi! No-- I'm not saying it's necessary to eat frozen dinners and canned foods! But you might look into the fact that yes-- mothers stayed at home cooking and caring for kids because, let's face it, they *had* to! It took too much time to prepare! All I'm saying is, *contrast* this time with our present time. Yes, they were healthier back then, but because it took so much time to grow their own food and cook it over an open flame, they didn't have time for much else.
Perhaps it is a good idea to make time to be healthy? For that matter, while some people have to work ridiculously long hours to make ends meet, an awfully large number of people could make time for a lot of other things by scaling back at work and still be fairly well-off. Maybe that becomes an issue of priorities? Just a thought.
