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I'm convinced that parents aren't the best teacher; they are less professional than qualified tutors


pujakurniawan19 9 / 16 4  
Jun 16, 2016   #1
Parents are the best teacher. Agree or disagree?

Children were taught by their parents when they was born. The parent are the teacher who make the future of the children. While majority opine that the best teacher is parents. Personally, I dispute with this opinion.

Parents have in-depth knowledge about their children's activities because they spend more time children than even teachers in schools. Because of that, they can find more deeply about their children's personality goodness and weakness. For example a research from Gadjah Mada University recently informs that the parents who often interact like telling about anything and discussing a problem can understand deeply their boy or girl. As a result, parents understand the children better and thus play a greater role for creating an excellent future for their children. Therefore, the parents have many opportunities in developing a good future for their children.

However, there are some reasons against previous notion. Firstly, in theory and academic knowledge, parents are sometimes are less professional than the instructions about teaching in schools. Actually, the case is very extremely influent for future career of the children. Moreover, parents are something too blind to notice the worse side of their children. Several parents occasionally lose in controlling and don't know standard of the children attitudes. In this case, teacher can make neutral judgment. Eventually, experiences learned from life have for greater role in life than the knowledge we learn from our parents.

To conclude, although parents have a huge opportunity in drawing ground the children and becoming a teacher for their children, I convince the best teacher isn't the parents.

Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Jun 16, 2016   #2
Hello

Your text is easy to understand, but you could use applying some adjustments to it so that it sounds better. They are as follows:

Children [...] tend to regard their parents as role models.
The parent [...] One of the reasons for this is that parents are in charge of teaching their children some basic social skills.
While [...] Whereas most people tend to believe that parents are the best teachers, I personally disagree with this point of view.
because they [...] spend much more time with their children, as compared to what it is being the case with school teachers.
Because of that [...] parents are supposed to be thoroughly aware of what accounts for their children's personality.
from Gadjah Mada University [...] shows that those parents who socialize with their children on a constant basis, are likely to have a good understanding of what their young ones aspire for in life.

excellent [...] bright
some reasons [...] to think that the mentioned opinion is not completely valid.
Firstly [...] First, as opposed to school teachers, most parents are unaware of the theories of teaching.
Actually [...] This is likely to influence children later in their lives.
something [...] sometimes
Several [...] Many parents prove unable of exercising full control over their children.
from life have [...] has a greater effect on our lives than the knowledge...
although [...] parents do, in fact, exert much influence on their children, I do not think that the former have what it takes to be deemed thoroughly effective teachers.

I hope it helped. Regards.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 16, 2016   #3
Hi Puja, as I read the first paragraph of your essay, I immediately notice your difficulty in choosing the right form of tenses in your sentences, such as "when they was born', instead of "when they were born", I believe this is just a start of a whole lot of necessary modification in your essay. The god news is, we are here to help out, so please find my suggestions below.

- Children wereare taught by
- their parents when they was bornsince birth, they are their first teachers .
- The parentParents are the
- teachers who makehones
- While majority opine that the best teachers are our
- is parents.

The above is just an example of how you can still strengthen your essay. I hope you follow through, practice your language rules and follow them religiously when you are writing. I hope to review your final revision soon.
wahyu 16 / 28 1  
Jun 17, 2016   #4
whats app mas kurniawan your essay is going to better than before, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph :

you can make more than 2 sentences and
you could use this pattern :
1. restatement the question
2. opinion,
3. new idea such as hope, recommendation

I hope that my suggestions help.

To conclude, although parents have a huge opportunity in drawing ground the children and becoming a teacher for their children, I convince the best teacher isn't the parents.

My suggestion :
To sum up, it is evident that there are two statements of people who become the best teacher for our children.In my opinion, I convince that the best teacher isn't the parents. Then i hope the schools' teacher to be more profesional to teach our children in their class than before for making them smart


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