Council donations to book clubs, Number of book club members - Writing task1

BOOK CLUB GRAPH ANALYSIS

The graph shows how much money book clubs received from a city council and The number of club members over four years.
In year 1 ,there were 6,000 club members and the money The city council gives to Book clubs was 20,000
Between year 1 and year 2,there was a slight decrease in club members from 6,000 to 5,000
However,in the same periods The money The council gave to Book clubs increased slightly
In year 3,the club members rose sharply.there was also a dramatic increase in the amount of money The council spent in book clubs.It peaked that year at £40,000.In year 4,

The number of book club members continued to rise,Reaching a peak at 12,000 members,The Money The book clubs received from the Council
fell by £5,000.
Generally,there has been an upward trend in the number of book club members, even though less money was given to clubs in year 4

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The image identification is somewhat correct. it is somewhat correct because the image shows 2 types of graphs within. A continuous line graph and a dotted line graph. Each image type should have been identified to help differentiate between the information provided. It will also help properly divide the paragraphas in the reporting area.The reader will be able to create a proper mental picture of the measurements as provided in the original, should the original image not be provided to the reader.

As far as proper writing rules are concerned, the writer has a problem with his word capitalization. He tends to provide capitalized words where it is not necessary, thus reducing his GRA score due to an obvious inability to follow English writing rules. He uses capitalized words inconsistently in this essay.

The formatting of the paragraphs are also off. Perhaps the writer wrote this on a mobile device rather than a laptop or tablet. Having done created incorrect paragraph presentations which would result in a failing GRA mark and an overall failing score in the end.

I strongly suggest that you should learn the basics of IELTS such as paragraphing. In IELTS writing task 1, you probably need four paragraphs: Introduction, Overview, Body 1 and Body 2. And you use all the body to describe the data from the chart.

Good luck

@nghiabui
Thank for your comment, actually i just learned English writing so i am not very good at it yet,