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In some countries most of the people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one


hello2hanson 1 / 2  
Oct 18, 2013   #1
In some countries, most of the people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a house?

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At present, people in many countries are more likely to rent a house than buy one. In this essay, I will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of renting a house.

There are several advantages of renting a house. Firstly, renting a house costs much less than buying one. Typically, buying a house places a heavy burden on the family, which could lead to the decline in the quality of life. By contrast, renting one usually accounts for a relatively small proportion of the household income. Secondly, renting a house allows people more opportunities to choose the one they really like. For example, some people prefer the house equipped with more facilities, such as a swimming pool, a beautiful yard. Similarly, other people tend to rent the house with the style of decoration they are in favor of. Finally, renting a house can have more flexibilities. People living in a renting house could live or work anywhere. Because unlike the owner, they don't have any concern about the house.

However, there are negative aspects to renting a house. Sometimes, people living in a house not owned by themselves may feel no the sense of belonging. This may be caused by some potential uncertainties, such as the landlord breaks the contract suddenly or declines a renewal. Another drawback may be that renting is not a cost-efficient way, compared with buying. Because the price of a house is rising in the long run, due to inflation.

To sum up, renting or buying a house completely depends on what the person pursues. If people like new challenges, they probably would rent a house. While others who want to lead a stable life might buy a house.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 19, 2013   #2
In this essay, I will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of renting a house.

... Rather than saying it this way, you can present the same idea more creatively;
There are obvious advantages in such decisions in terms of cost and facilities. However, we also cannot deny the fact that these decisions are free from any drawbacks.

Now go to your body paragraphs to talk about what are the advantages and disadvantages.
behrooz_00133 3 / 3  
Oct 19, 2013   #3
i think you should avoid to make such list you can write introduction in simple way imean 1.attention grabber 2.reworded topic 3.thesis statement if needed
OP hello2hanson 1 / 2  
Oct 19, 2013   #4
yeah, your suggestion is much better. Sometimes, I could not find the proper sentences to rephrase the topic.:(
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 19, 2013   #5
Well... follow this format for your introduction; When you think on these lines, you'll have a natural flow :)
OP hello2hanson 1 / 2  
Oct 19, 2013   #6
dumi
Hi dumi, thank very much.
I need to practice more.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Oct 19, 2013   #7
However, there are negative aspects toin renting a house.

Sometimes, people living in a house not owned by themselves may feel no the sense of belonging.

.... very good point :)
In many instances, the people living in a rented house do not feel any ownership or sense of belonging of that house.

This may be caused by some potential uncertainties, such as the landlord breaks the contract suddenly or declines a renewal.

Now you need to tell what are the results of such feelings - you can say that they do not care about maintaining the property well, may not care about the neighborhood and disturb it with their activities since they are their for only a short term etc.

Also, don't forget to provide specific examples to all the reasons you provide.


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