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"a cruise with my boyfriend" - Describe your perfect vacation



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Sep 14, 2011   #1
Hi, my name is Rachael, I recently came across this website looking when I was looking for help on a different essay, and this one has been extremely helpful. I am writing an essay for my English 11 class. Our topic is "Describe your perfect vacation".

Please and Thank you for your help (:

If I was to take my dream vacation, I would take a cruise with my boyfriend. A cruise would be perfect, considering it is romantic, and there is plenty to do. I would choose a cruise that started in Baltamore, Maryland, and stopped at a beach in Florida, then the Bahamas.

On the ship there is plenty to do. I would start my day by calling room service for a wonderful breakfast in bed. After, I would head to the pool and relax in the sun, feeling the breeze of the ocean. As the day goes on, I would walk around the ship, with my boyfriend, and look in the shops on the boat or even go see a show in the theatre. Once the sun goes down, I would hit the bars and clubs, (once I'm of age of course) and party until the sun is back up.

When the ship arrives to Florida, I would head straight for the beach. Laying on the beach is very relaxing and it is the perfect thing to do on vacation. I would also visit aquariums around the area, my favorite thing to do. If the boat stayed until late evening, I would walk around and see the nightlife.

The Bahamas is what I would be looking foward to the most. I would enjoy the scenery and beautiful blue ocean. I would go snorkling and parasailing with my boyfriend. The shops on the island would be unique and different from back home, so i would definatley shop there.

djyhu 1 / 3  
Sep 14, 2011   #2
As the day goes on, I would walk around the ship, with

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The shops on the island would be unique and different from back home, so i would definitely shop there.


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