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Cuba's Underwater Jewels Are in Tourism's Path


ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Oct 13, 2016   #1
A couple years ago, marine life in Cuba so beautiful. As time goes on, climate change was change everything such as disappearing endangered fish even the size can be minimized. There are so many varieties of fish life in the ocean, but now decrease moreover the color has been vanish because of bleaching process. Besides, the wild animal marine is always hunted by a human for earn much money. Cuba showed underwater jewels with unique diversity especially corals. The government suggests for tourists to protect the environment as it is rarely founded in other places around the world. Consequently, to preserve tourism when the visitors coming to do not disturbs marine life such as do not take any corals for trades and clown fish. On the other hand, the key of success also maintaining number of predators for example crocodiles and sharks to reach a balanced ecosystem.

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Naoki28 10 / 18 2  
Oct 14, 2016   #2
Hi ryan31,
Check the amendment below.

..., marine life in Cuba was so beautiful.
... the color has been vanishvanishing because of bleaching process.
... marine is always hunted by a human for ...
..., the key of success is also maintaining number of predators ...

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septiadara29 48 / 67 9  
Oct 14, 2016   #3
Hallo Ryan31, I will give you my opinions about your article summarize

..., marine life in Cuba was(because you give a personal description) so beautiful. As time goes on, the climate change washaschange altered everything such as ...

There arewere(because it should be in the past, not in the present) so many varieties of ...
... marine is always hunted by a human for earn much money. However,(because it has a contrast sentence between line 4 and line 5)
... with unique diversity(,) especially the corals.
Consequently, to preserve tourism, when the visitors coming todo notshould not or are banned to disturbs (...) as do not take any corals and clown fish for trades and clown fish .

..., the key of success is also keep maintaining the number of predators(,) for example crocodiles and sharks(,) to reach a balanced ecosystem.


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