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IELTS: These days many students are doing a part time job.



sachin0312 2 / 6  
Apr 1, 2013   #1
1) These days many students are doing a part time job. Is it a good or a bad development? What is your opinion about it? Give examples from your own experience.

Please give your opinion on the below essay.

It is matter of intense debate that whether students should do part time job or only concentrate on their academic study. It is true that, with the social and economic development, the number of students doing part time job increased considerably. This approach has some pros and cons. Before reaching the conclusion, I will look into both side of this approach.

On one side, people who oppose students from doing part time job have opinion that, every person has to do job or business after completion of their studies. But university or school students need only to concentrate on their studies, as this helps them to attain good grades in exams. Eventually this will be more helpful for them to build their career after pass out from universities.

On the other hand, people who encourage and support students to do part time job, think that, this approach teaches students some important life skills, such as time management. Student who do part time job, have to manage their time wisely as they have to complete their daily commitments like study and assignments. Furthermore they also earn some money which helps to ease the burden their parent's shoulder. Also this helps them to bear their daily expenses like lodging and boarding charges. Moreover they can better understand the value of money so they spend them carefully. These skills make them a responsible person of the society.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down by saying that, pros of doing part time job while studding outweigh the cons, because students learns most important life skills and can become successful in their career.

mhss 18 / 53  
Apr 1, 2013   #2
Please note that,

It is true that, with the social and economic development, the number of students doing part time jobS HAS increased considerably.

I will look into both sideS of this approach.

On one side, people who oppose students from doing part time job have AN opinion that, every person has to do job or business after completion of their studies

Eventually this will be more helpful for them to build their career after passING out from universities

On the other hand, people who encourage and support students to do part time jobS, think that, students ARE BENEFITED WITH some important life skills, such as time management

StudentS who do part time jobS, have to manage their time EFFICIENTLY as they have to complete their daily commitments like study and assignments.

Furthermore, they also earn some money which helps to ease the burden their parent.

Moreover, they can LEARN HOW TO HANDLE money EFFECTIVELY

In a nutshell...(avoid put in ..)
OP sachin0312 2 / 6  
Apr 1, 2013   #3
Thanks for your valuable inputs :)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 2, 2013   #4
I will look into both sides of this approachtrend.

.... it's a trend rather than an approach.

On one side, people who opposeto students from doing part time job have the opinion that, every person has to do job or business after completion of their studies.

.... this is not a strong argument.... you need to tell them a more convincing reason for them to claim so.... such as part time job may distract the student's focus on studies or put student in trouble with managing his time or student may loose his interest in his studies etc.etc.

Also you need to support your reasons with good specific examples.


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