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Should the dealth penalty be abolished in current society?


aleafsun 9 / 19  
Aug 5, 2011   #1
Hey, there,
I want to thanks every one who is going to give some comments about my essay. Thank you for your time.
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Prompts: Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (at least 250 words)

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To execute or not to execute, to me, is like to be or not to be. This is a question. However, I, as a human being, believe capital punishment should be banned for three reasons below.

Firstly, from a perspective of social morality, death penalty should be banned. The protection of human lives, freedom, properties and such rights is the main purpose of organizing a government. Consequently, it is governments' obligation to protect their citizens' lives but not deprive them.

Secondly, from a perspective of social deviant behavior, death penalty should be abolished. A tit-for-tat strategy, comparing to a pay-back-in-kind strategy, would impact the young generation adversely. By paying back an eye for an eye, we might stick our lives in a vicious circle. Conversely, when we embrace kindness and goodness toward others, we are capable to have better lives. Furthermore, how can we condemn an unfeeling murderer exploiting people's lives while we are doing the same thing?

Thirdly, from a perspective of healing, death penalty should be abrogated. Some revenge-focused individuals consider that nothing is going to change unless they finally kill the person who has killed their beloved ones. On the contrary, revenge will never cure the grief and emptiness of a lost loved one. What is more, revenge is useless in that it does not bring the victim back to life. The truth is that forgiveness is the only way to start the healing process.

In summary, even though people hold various viewpoints toward death penalty, taking social morality, social deviant behavior and healing process into account, I am still for banning death penalty.

jostar 6 / 13  
Aug 5, 2011   #2
I totally agree with your viewpoints. My country is still struggling about this issue.

In a civil and modern country, death penalty should not be carried out. And there are some scientific studies, saying that the capital punishment do not stop violence, because violent behaviours, especially killings, are quite emotional actions, so this rational legal threat won't help prevent the disaster from happening.

And I see examples from Utoya, Norway, even though Brevik, the murderer, has killed more than 70 innocent people, he still would be sentenced to jail for probably less than 30 years. No death penalty.

I think you could put out more specific examples, to strenthen your opinions. Generally, I believe it is a very good article.

Zhou
OP aleafsun 9 / 19  
Aug 6, 2011   #3
Dear Zhou, I appreicate your sharing related this topic. Thanks a million.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Aug 9, 2011   #4
To execute or not to execute, to me, is like to be or not to be.----Wow, very interesting!

This is question . Both are meaningful questions, because ... (give a reason for comparing these two questions. What do they have in common?) However, I, as a human being, believe capital punishment should be banned for three reasons below. (Insert a thesis statement that sums up the main idea of the whole essay.)

Firstly, from a perspective...

You did a great job. Here is my tip for you: To write a very strong essay, try to write a sentence that expresses the MAIN MESSAGE you want the reader to remember. Put that MOST IMPORTANT SENTENCE OF THE ESSAY at the end of the first paragraph.

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