Hi Vassan,
First, I believe it is fine if you can manage 325 words within the time allocation for this task. However, you need to be conscious about time because it has a major bearing on this type of exams :)The world is becoming more health conscious day by day. Staying fit is the order of the day and many people are trying their best to keep fit by incorporating changes in their lifestyle. Although there is nothing wrong in being healthy,
Your introduction seems pretty good. You have taken a good entrance to your theme topic and explained it briefly, but impressively. The only weak point is that your opinion is not that well presented. Tell the reader very clearly in which side of the argument you are with;people tend to take the rough path and forget that even small changes in their lifestyle and simple exercises can help them lead a healthy and active life.
Here it is not clearly said that you support the idea of leading normal lives is the best way to stay healthy. Leading a normal life means something different to doing exercises ... that idea doesn't come from what you have written. For example, you can say this;People tend to take the rough path with routine physical exercises, strict nutritious diets and medicines in order to stay fit and healthy. However, they forget the fact that leading a normal life is the best way to have a healthy happy life.The first thing that comes to a normal person's mind, including memine
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This hard work does pay dividends by giving them a physically fit body but does staying healthy only mean being physically fit?
Split this sentence to two;This hard work does pay dividends by giving them a physically fit body. But does staying healthy only mean being physically fit?--------- a very good point and it is well presented :)Sometimes spending a lot of time trying to just be physically fit or eating according to special diets, which doesn'tdon't(this refers to the diets) satisfy the taste buds, will make the personala person unfit emotionally.
You have very good ideas and also you write well.... Keep practicing with time. You can surely go for a good score )