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TOEFL; Nowadays, dependence on neighbors is much less compared to previous eras



axn1118 2 / 3  
Jul 11, 2013   #1
Nowadays, neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past

When it comes to discuss about this statement, I agree with that neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past. The reasons are as follows.

First of all, people rather know their neighbors nowadays. By virtue of the strangeness, neighbors have little chance to depend on each other. For example, I used to attend to a sociology class. One day, the professor in this class made a violation about a question that whether you are familiar with your neighbors or not. Surprisingly, there were half and more students who voted for the answer that they are not familiar with their neighbors. That is why people can not seek for neighbors' help in the present.

Secondly, people have less confidence of others than before. In these days, people are easily meet someone who wants to take their fortune away. For instance, I ran into a man who grabbed a huge bag of shoes when I was jogging in the street of my community. He told me that he was about to donate the shoes he asked from others to contribute. And, he asked me whether I would like to donate some shoes as well. I did donate. Unfortunately, it was shockingly for me to find out that he stole the shoes from our community and sold them on the internet. So, this experience made me trust people harder than before.

Last but not least, people interact with others on the internet more than people used to be. In fact, we no longer make friends face to face. Take my personal experience for example, I used to hang out with my friends in the past. We went shopping, singing and other outdoor activities. But, I hang out only on the internet with them by now. It leads us to depend on the friends we meet on the internet rather than on the neighbors we meet face to face.

Consequently, neighbors depend on each other for the reasons in the above statement. Because people rely on the reaction in the internet more than face to face, neighbors become less important by now. Also, people hardly trust each other than before, which makes the relationship between neighbors set up in a difficult way. Otherwise, people are not familiar with their neighbors in the present. That's why they don't seek help from their neighbors. As the result, I agree with the statement that neighbors depend on each other less than it used to be.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 11, 2013   #2
When it comes to discuss about this statement, I agree with that neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past.

Better you introduce the prompt first and then express your view on it.

. For example, I used to attend to a sociology class.

One day, the professor in this class made a violation about a question that whether you are familiar with your neighbors or not.

.... why you used the word "violation" ? .... you violate laws or rules ... I cannot find any sort of relevance here :(

Secondly, people have less confidenceofin others than before

In these days, people are easily meet someone who wants to take their fortune away

.... people meet / people are meeting


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