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Descriptive Paragraph on Floods


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Jul 27, 2022   #1

evidence of global warming



Severe floods and thunderstorms are other vulnerabilities that remain very loyal vicegerents of global warming. The raising thermometer evaporates invisible water droplets into the atmosphere, adding volume to the darkest clouds. When the angered sky punches the surface with its stored liquid, the Earth cries for help from the heavens. The soil erodes from the fruitful land like the peeling of the skin adjacent to the nails. While this degradation pushes the breathing beings to leave their forever-lived habitats, many drown in the monstrous flow of the water. The muddy and dirt-carrying body hits up homes, trees, and other infrastructure like a charging bull and destroys the lives of mankind. This catastrophe unleashes man to deadly health vulnerabilities. Surely, no one ever wants to experience such calamities frequently. It is now evident that global warming exposes man to lethal floods and thunderstorms.
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Jul 28, 2022   #2
When writing a descriptive paragraph, the author must remember to consider the audience that he is writing for. The wording or vocabulary used in the essay should be one that reflects the crowd that will be reading this statement. In this case, the writer has over done the word usage. It is not gared towards the student group that will be reading this essay. While it is nice to know that the writer knows advanced English vocabulary and he has a knack for writing creative pieces, the essay itself is problematic since it tends to over emphasize the discussion in the wrong manner. He should be sticking to everyday English words that can easily be understood by his peers. He has written a creative piece that is not a descriptive paragraph as is required by the presentation.


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