The diagram delineates the step-by-step production of chocolate

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Task 1:

The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram delineates the step-by-step production of chocolate.
Overall, it is readily apparent that this linear, man-made procedure involves 10 steps, grouped into 4 main stages, starting with the harvesting, followed by raw processing, roasting and finalizing with the formation of the standard chocolate product.

Looking at the first stage, one can see that red pods are riped from the cacao tree, which are grown mainly in South America, Africa, and Indonesia. After being harvested, the pods are cored, taking the white cocoa beans out for further processing. The beans are then fermented in large trays, which subsequently being spread in sun to dry out the moisture. Turning to the next phase, the beans are put in large sacks prior to being transported to the factory by train or lorry.

In the next phases, the beans are roasted at 350 Celcius degrees, before being crushed to remove the outer shell. In the final stages, the inner part is pressed into liquid chocolate, which is the product that customers are commonly familiar with.

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Your summary overview had a good start but then, you dropped the ball when you tried to summarize the procedure. Rather than the continuous presentation, you should have inserted pauses in between. Instead of commas, you should have created a more informative overview by using clear sentence presentations instead. You didnot need to try and compress everything into one sentence. That creates a confusing presentation fear the reader, who has to track what you have written.

Based on the series of related images, you should have used the 4 paragraph report. It would have allowed for a better and clearer explanation of the manufacturing proceeds. The better explained the process, the clearer itis to the reader. Don't rush. Always outline your discussion before writing the draft. Avoid passing off the draft as your final paper. Always review and improve the presentation first.