IELTS task 1: Diagram on electricity generation from tides

Please look at my essay below. I really appreciate your help.

electricity generation process

The diagram illustrates the process of electricity generation from the inflow and outflow of the tides.

The system is usually constructed across an inland bay or estuary where a large body of water can be contained. It comprises a main barrage structure and a roadway built on top of it, a sluice gates and an electricity generator. The main construction blocks tidal inflow and outflow. The sluice gate, which is located behind the main barrage structure, is used to control the flow. Under the barrage construction, a tunnel houses the electricity generator used to turn the energy of tidal flow into electricity.

The system is started by opening the sluice gate. When tides rise, water from the see goes under the main barrage structure, through the generator to the inland bay or estuary. During this process, the water spins the turbines in the generator and generates electricity. Similarly, at low tide, water also goes from the bay through the generator and again, power is generated.

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You misspelled "sea" as see. "See" means to have something in sight while "sea" is a body of water. Be careful of homonyms in your presentation The difference in spelling and meaning, when you use the incorrect word in a sentence will cause points deductions for your LR score. Disregarding that very slight error in word usage on your part, it is safe to say that your Task 1 essay properly explains the procedure based on the guidelines in the diagram. It is important that you do not fall into the trap of using run-on sentences in your presentations. I

in these types of presentations, students often tend to use commas to form an inclusive sentence for several discussions. It would be safer if you do not join more than 2 connected procedures in one sentence. You can avoid accidentally creating run-on sentences that way. It also allows you to better mix up your sentence presentation so that you have an equal number of complex and simple sentences in the presentation. Once these practices become second nature to you, you will find that your writing will be easier and your scores will also be increased based on the grading rubic.

Good job! Keep writing, you have the potential to score highly in this type of task. I look forward to reviewing more of your practice essays.

@Holt
Thank you very much for your review Holt. I will keep on trying

Hi, when I looked into the diagram, I actually didn't know where to start and which steps. Can you share your way to deal with this type of task 1. Thank you so much!

@trvaanh
When analyzing the diagram, I usually try to figure out how many parts/stages are there and the function of each part. Then I look at the system as a whole to see how each part connects to the other. You also need some general knowledge to understand how the system works so I recommend you read more. Its also good for your reading practice.