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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by select

hieunguyen 1 / 1  
May 24, 2023   #1

The given diagram demonstrates how aluminum cans are recycled.

In general, the process accounts for a total of 7 steps which can be separated into 3 main groups: collecting, recycling and manufacturing, and selling.

Firstly, the used cans are collected from the bins and transferred to the recycling manufacturer by truck. In the next steps, these cans are put into the machine so that the used cans are cleaned and sorted to ensure the next phase, after cleaning and sorting, these cans are shredded and compressed into many tiny pieces and crushed in the special machine to ensure a prospect size. In the third step, the small pieces from the cans are heated, melted in high temperatures, and turned into liquid, then liquid aluminum is rolled about 2.5 to 6 mm thick and molded into the sheets, these sheets are used to produce beverage cans. Finally, the complete cans can be consumed and about 74% are recycled after using them in the UK.
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May 25, 2023   #2
The summary overview is incomplete. There is no clear image identifier. What sort of diagram was presented? Since there is no image uploaded with your presentation, I cannot accurately help you with that problem. The essay also fails to follow the correct 3 paragraph format for the presentation. The paragraphs present should have been:

1. Summary + Trend
2. First 4 related steps
3. Last 3 related steps

You absolutely should never compress all of the steps into a single paragraph as that would indicated an unfamiliarity with academic writing. Learn how to present cohesive paragraphs, using relationship discussion guides in your presentation. You did a good job in the last paragraph, you just forgot that you need to follow a specific writing format for the task 1 essay.
OP hieunguyen 1 / 1  
May 25, 2023   #3
thank you very much about the feedback and sorry about the diagram cuz this is the first time that I use essay forum ,I don't know how to upload the image :((
ptthao0801 3 / 4 1  
May 28, 2023   #4
There is an Image button ([+] image) on the toolbar. Click on it, then click Upload.

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