IELTS task 1: The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.

student accommodation in 2010 and now

The maps illustrate how a student accommodation building has changed from 2010 to the present.
Overall, there have been many significant changes in the building between 2010 and today. Looking at the maps, it can be clearly seen that the student bedrooms and the gardens have experienced extensive modification over the same time period.

As can be seen from the maps, the building was a relatively green area with three gardens to the northwest, the north, and the south of the map in 2010. However, only the northern one remains unchanged in the here and now while the others were knocked down to make way for a new student bedroom and a car park. Moreover, the addition of two bedrooms brings the number of the student ones to 5, replacing the former living room.

Turning to the other features, the current building has a lot of doors added to travel more easily between the rooms and the exterior. Other major changes include the instruction of an en-suite room and the construction of a new social area in the kitchen. The big bathroom in the center part of the map, however, remains at the same location.

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It will do the writer well to remember that this is an interpretative essay based on provided information from a given image. The interpretation should be clear enough to the reader without having to refer to the image. The writer who asks the reader to refer to the given image will automatically lose points as he is seen as unable to properly reconstruct the image based on data reporting. The reference to a glance at the image was done twice in this essay. So the writer can expect to receive deductions for that reference. It will be minimal but still, a deduction is a deduction that will affect the final score.

When referring to directions, the term used should be "area" or "location" instead of "one" since that is not a numerical reference but rather, a location marker. Wrong word references will also cause deductions in the LR score, specially when it is used incorrectly in the sentence.

The explanatiion is pretty much acceptable, but problematic in presentation format and word usage. These are areas where the writer can easily improve his scores in based on the growth of his English vocabulary and his ability to remember that he is reconstructing an image for the reader, who has no access to the image at that point.