A different language' foreigner can overcome problems by changing, adapting, and growing personality

QUESTION- Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extend to you agree or disagree with this statement

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In the 21st century, we know that more and more people are moving to other countries for opportunities. Some people think that living in a foreign country where a person has to speak a different language can cause immense social and practical problems. This essay will argue why staying in a country with a foreign culture and language doesn't cause problems instead provides a person an urge towards personal growth.

As travel became relatively easy compared to the past. While people have experienced growth for other opportunities, speaking a foreign language will bring social and practical problems. A person might experience it difficult for adapting to a sudden change in language causing social problems with the local's way of culture and also practical problems that arise due to the inability to communicate properly. For instance, when I visited America I found it quite difficult to communicate with others for my basic day-to-day practical needs, also I found myself offending someone because I didn't know how to convey my message properly. These reasons cause some people to think that extreme social and practical problems are inevitable.

These problems which arise are a boon for an individual rather than a bane. The sudden change in language will urge the individual to learn the language and customs of that particular country and help them to grow as a person. For example, when I was in America I gradually learned how to greet and treat people the right way and in turn got back the same respect from others, as a result, I was able to communicate and learn properly from the professors about how to proceed my research. These social and practical problems can be eliminated when an individual learns to blend in with society, learn about other's customs which bring them a huge career and personal growth.

Although problems arise due to the inability to speak a foreign language, these can be mitigated by learning to solve them. This essay argues why an individual in a foreign language speaking country can come across problems by changing, adapting, and growing personality.

Hi, I would like to give some thoughts about your essay.

First, I don't think it is necessary to write bluntly about the purpose of your essay as in : This essay will argue why ... and This essay argues why an individual ...

You can write it more persuasively and clearly, for example : Staying in a country with a foreign culture and language doesn't always cause problems. Instead it will push people to grow.

I also noticed your first sentence on your second paragraph is not a complete sentence yet : As travel became relatively ...

What is the implication of your statement? It is needed because you used the word as for the first word in the sentence. If you just want to make a statement maybe you can write as : Travel is becoming relatively easy compared to the past.

Hope this helps :)

@kays
Thank you for your consideration.

You failed to properly respond to the prompt requirement which is: To what extent do you agree or disagree? Based on your response, it is clear to the examiner that you did not understand the discussion instructions so your response is responsive only in a minimal way. You should have responded to the question first, then indicated your reasons for your response in a summarized manner. For example:

Spending time residing in a new nation often results in some difficulties. These difficulties often relate to learning the dialect of the native people. This language barrier often causes discomfort and stress in relation to merging with the culture of the region. While these are two different mindsets supported by two different groups, I find myself strongly in opposition to this argument because resiDr ing in a different region allows for personal growth and cultural learning in the person.

Now, the main problem with your essay is that your opinion summary in the last sentence of the paraphrase is not supported in your first reasoning paragraph. So you will be scored only on the paragraph that represents a supporting argument based on your opinion in the prompt paraphrase. That means, your essay will not be under the word requirement.

You wrote 348 words, which is impossible during the 40 minute task. That means you did not bother to review and correct your essay mistakes. In this instance, the increased word count will be useless because 115 words will be taken out of your response, leaving you with 233 words. Meaning, your essay is now under the minimum word count. Without meeting the 250 word requirement, it will be more difficult for you to achieve a passing score. This will be difficult to achieve because you will also have point deductions in the conciseness, formality, and vocabulary considerations of your presentation.

Next time, make sure to present 2 reasoning paragraphs that support your given opinion. The discussion instructions do not warrant a comparative discussion so you should be using the singular opinion discussion in this presentation. Your concluding summary should only summarize your given topic, opinion, and discussion points as well. Since your conclusion does not do that, you will receive additional point deductions. Basically, the main problem with your essay is the response format along with the wrong format for the opening paraphrase and concluding summary.

@Holt
thank you for your interest. Will try to rectify them.