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Different maniacal types in cultures



aqeel 8 / 25  
Jan 20, 2013   #1
There are many maniacal types in our cultures, such as sporting mania. The fans go to the football game because they want to watch the team who supported put a ball in the nets. Likewise, in the religious mania,We noticed the weeping in some religious occasions, or there is rapture in the other religious involvements. However, can the mania be good, alarming, or bad ? I think that some kinds of the mania is important like learning English for the following reasons.

English mania can devoted people to learn English, then they will have a good opportunity job, so they can get better life. I have watched a documentary movie about the learning English of the china students. They study 12 hour a day for three years to determined their future. While they were studying English with huge group, they shouted " I want to speak English. I want to change my life". In short, English learning may help the people to improve their life.

The yearning of English learning as a second language can be involved to solve the global problems. As the music which is used as language of the motions over the world, English is considered as a global language which is helped the specialists and to talk with others who are from other countries to solve the dangerous problem, such as the environmental pollution, drought, and hunger. Even though people recognize that native language is our life, they figure out the importance of the English language in the global problem`s solution.

In the conclusion, English learning intensively can help people whose have this mania to improve their lives. Moreover, it help the scientists to solve the universal problems.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 21, 2013   #2
Hi aqueel,
Seems that you type your essay topic in the subject field. Since it allows only a limited number of characters it is better you type your essay prompt in the message block just above the essay.

It's better to have the prompt to provide you with more relevant comments. :)
Waiting to have your prompt to give you my feed back :)
OP aqeel 8 / 25  
Jan 21, 2013   #3
thank you Dumi
the promote is
Do you agree or disagree with the say: Some people believe the best way to change their lives is to be English mania.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 22, 2013   #4
Well... as per your prompt, your introduction sounds a bit out of topic. This topic is specific to the fact that some people are crazy about following English traditions. Therefore your introduction sounds out of topic and it does not convey or introduce this topic title to the reader at all.

I feel it is good if you re-do this essay and post it to the forum. We will help you with our comments for sure :)


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