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There a different systems to produce electricity - by water's power and air pressure.


Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 24, 2016   #1
WRITING TASK 1 HOW TO PRODUCE ELECTRICITY

The diagram shows information about the process to create electricity by hydroelectric dam and wave-air generator. Overall, there a different process to produce electricity based on the diagram that is by water's power and air pressure.

First method to create electricity by hydroelectric dam is used reservoir, gate in the reservoir, penstock, turbine, spindle, power lines, water released, and water groove. The process begin with gate is paired in the reservoir that used to open and closes water from the penstock speed water up. The penstock is entered water from reservoir, while gate is opened. Then, the turbine and spindle are turned by water's speed. Finally, electricity is produced by rotation of turbine and spindle. Now, electricity distributed in the power of line to every houses in city and water from the turbine released into the river and the farmland.

The second method is creating electricity by wave-air generator which is using air pressure. It is made from generator which consist of lower chamber, upper chamber, spindle and turbine. Spindle and turbine are paired in upper chamber which is connected with generator out of the upper chamber. The first step is waves which is filled to lower chamber, and air pressure enter into the gate between lower chamber and upper chamber. Next, turbine and spindle are rotated by air pressure, when air rises out of the upper chamber. Finally, the generator is produced electricity by rotation of spindle.

In conclusion, hydroelectricity dam and wave air generator are process to produce electricity. They have different based on the production process and their resources.




hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Aug 24, 2016   #2
Hi Fadhilahumar91.
This is some corrections for your writing above.

.. electricity distributed ininto the power of line to every ...

... electricity by wave-air generator which is using air pressure. It is made from generatorwhich consist of lower chamber, (...) in upper chamber which is connected with generator ...

The first step is waves whichis filled to lower chamber, and ...

In the paragraph above, you mention four times "which" as the conjunction. You may combine it with another conjunction, namely "that"So that the reader did not saturated with the which word.


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