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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. -- ielts



Atakeielts 5 / 13  
Feb 18, 2014   #1
Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages?

Along with the search of more comprehensive techniques to deal with the problems that might occur in the world, credit card is invented as a quick and easy way to pay the bills. With the simple steps for one to be granted, an increasing number of people are now using it. While it has some obvious advantages, the potential problems it yield should not be neglected as well. Overall, in my opinion, the benefits of such method still outweigh its drawbacks.

First of all, one of the primary functions of credit card is to provide a convenient alterative to make payments whenever is needed. This way, people are able to withdraw a great amount of money without carrying much cash around. Take purchasing cars as an example, people do not want using a suitcase carrying hundreds of thousands of dollars to make the purchase. Latest technologies even link the cards to one's phone, making it possible to pay just by one click. This way, online shopping is made possible by the use of credit cards, yielding even more convenience for users.

Second, credit card is safe comparing to using cash. It provides protection against street crimes such as theft and robbery by password protection and tracking measures. Although criminals are coming up with increasing credit card crimes, it is still not as easy as cash ones. Comprehensive planning and a team is usually needed for the process from obtaining password through to getting the card, which prevent it from becoming popular.

However, using credit cards encourages risk-taking in some way since it allows overdrafts to be made. Also the zero-interest for saving policy discourage people from saving first then spending, which is detriment to personal financial management. Thus some people who lost control and spend an amount that well exceed their repay abilities might affect the whole economic system.

To conclude, there are many advantages of credit card including its value of convenience and safety. Despite the potential problems it causes for individuals and society, the prevalence of this in recent years has proved its usefulness to people. With more measures to solve the problems, the payment method is becoming increasingly comprehensive.

SHanafi 120 / 357  
Feb 18, 2014   #2
Hi... this prompt same with my last.

I underlined that both sentences have similarity.

This way, people are able to withdraw a great amount of money without carrying much cash around.

credit card is safe comparing to using cash
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 18, 2014   #3
Along with the search of more comprehensive techniques to deal with the problems that might occur in the world, credit card is invented as a quick and easy way to pay the bills.

... I really don't see or understand any meaning of the first part of this sentence. Your hook should be more interesting and come up with a punch to the reader.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 19, 2014   #4
First of all, one of the primary functions of credit card is to provide a convenient alterativealternate solution to make payments whenever is neededon credit basis.

This way, people are able to withdraw a great amount of money without carrying much cash around.

This helps people avoid carrying bulk cash when they travel around.

Take purchasing cars as an example, people do not want using a suitcase carrying hundreds of thousands of dollars to make the purchase.

For example, when you want to purchase a car which involves a large sum of money, credit card becomes a handy solution that does not require for you to carry that much of money to the seller.
aldebaran 8 / 16  
Feb 20, 2014   #5
Hi,
credit card isWAS invented as a quick and easy way to pay the bills

Second, credit card is safeRcomparing toTHANusing cash. It provides protection against street crimes such as theft and robbery by password protection and tracking measures.

Cheers,
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 21, 2014   #6
With the simple steps for one to be granted,

.... granted what? you need to specify;
With the simple steps of one being granted credit

Second, credit card is safe comparing to using cash.

Second, the credit card is a safer method of making payments compared to carrying cash for the same purpose / Second, the credit card is a safer method of making payments in contrast to carrying cash for the same purpose.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 22, 2014   #7
However, using credit cards encourages risk-taking in some way since it allows overdrafts to be made.

This is mostly a risk for the bank, but not for the consumer. The actual risk for the consumer is that he may sometimes be caught up in credit card scams. Nowadays there are many credit card frauds take place, especially with online payments. Another disadvantage with credit cards is that the consume tends to purchase things without having an actual need. Also, he wouldn't realize his capacity for spending at the time of purchase.


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