HAVE YOUR EATING HABITS CHANGED SINCE YOU'VE BEEN IN COLLEGE?

Yes, I believe that I have changed eating habits since I've been in College. There are two reasons why I did change. One reason is that I want to be kept better life because it's an important to the right food for health in daily and second reasons; I need to decrease my weight.

Firstly, when I began college in Washington, DC, I had generally healthy eating habits, a product of having lived with my parents as Pakistan and Canada food. In my first month of college life, I tried to continue these habits even though I noticed myself that I dislike to eat American foods such as junks, burgers, too higher calories, and not similar Canada or Pakistan foods. I realized that I have an increased about closed to 15 pounds in the end of semester. Hence, I ate some chocolate cake and ordered pizza deliveryman. These are not health food.

Fortunately, since my first year, I have learned that I will have to adjust the right foods for change habits. I also take responsibility for my own eating habits. I now know how to change habits. That means my mom will not be able to watch over my shoulder to make sure I have eaten my carrots instead of slipping them to the dog; I will have to do that job for her.

In conclusion, I reckon I did change for eating habits since I attended at second year of college. I have also realized that when I eat better, I need to be careful with my health what calories I usually food for daily. I felt like to begin more dependable and do better in the future.

Firstly, when I began college in Washington, DC I had generally healthy eating habits, a product of having lived with my parents and eating Pakistani and Canadian foods. Why is this healthier? Give a couple examples: there is less fat, how it is cooked, etc. In my first month of college life, I tried to continue these habits. I dislike American foods such as junk food and burgers because they are too high in calories, and are different than the foods I was used to at home.As the foods I was accustomed to at home were not available at college, I found myself eating chocolate cake and ordering pizza often, neither of which are health foods. By the end of the semester, I realized I gaineed about 15 pounds.

Fortunately since my first year, I have learned that I have to adjust my eating habits to include the right foods. I also take responsibility for my own eating habits. That means my mom will not be able to watch over my shoulder to make sure I have eaten my carrots instead of slipping them to the dog; I will have to do that job for her.

In conclusion, I reckon I did change my eating habits since I began attending college.I have also realized that in order to eat better, I need to watch what I eat and be careful how many calories I usually eat in a day. I also need to make sure that the foods I choose are healthy choices. Because of this experience I feel like I can be more dependable and do better in the future ."

I did do good deal of rewriting here; I think I was able to keep your ideas and meaning intact. If not, let me know and we can work through it again. Your ideas are good, but I am assuming English is not your native language, and as such the order of your words and such kind of get jumbled up. You do a good job of relating your personal experience in the essay; you are able to pinpoint your weaknesses and are able to work on them and turn them into strengths. This is a valuable trait that will serve you well in all areas of your life; you are very fortunate as not many people have this! Keep up your good work!

Thanks for editing my essay.. Actually, I am deaf :)
I have to take several practices on essay before begin college this August.

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