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IELTS Essay : effects of advertisement on daily life



huyenanh1508 5 / 10  
Aug 10, 2013   #1
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really don't need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point do you agree with ?

In modern society, machines work mainly in the production progress and humans only have to control it. Therefore, there are more supply sources than demand on marketplace. To prevent an economical crisis, advertisement was born to encourage people to buy things which are sometimes unnecessary for them.

I was once told not to believe in advertisements because they are not true. First of all, advertisements on TV or images on the streets are always well editted by using photoshop or professional programs before they are represented to consumers. A case in point is clothing advertisements. Beautiful models wear fashionable clothes. Everyone wants to buy these clothes because each style is created for each typical group of customers. Employees in the marketing department are taught how to seduce consumers to buy their products.

Second, in order to avoid products being left in the stock and not being bought, there are methods such as sale-off programs for many reasons: end of season sale-off, sale-off on national holidays... We-customers are always tricked to spend our money more and more.

Advertisements have always been a tool to stimulate consumption but overuse it can lead to serious consequences. For instance, many people believe the effectiveness of some cosmetics brands with the aid of their flawless photos. Their models always have perfect skin, they always look stunning despite their age.But effectiveness of cosmetics depends on its compatibility with the Skin. If the skin and cosmetics are not compatible with each each other, the use of cosmetics can lead to allergie. Another example is medicine. Some medicines are advertised to contain lots of vitamins but in fact they do not.

One way to avoid spending too much money on unnecessary things is to make a list of what to buy before going shopping. Let's together be conscious customers.

MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Aug 10, 2013   #2
In modern society, machines work mainly in the production progress and humans only have to control it. Therefore, there are more supply sources than demand on marketplace. To prevent an economical crisis,

To me, these sound a bit off-topic. I don't think advertising is a measure to prevent economic crises.
Also, you didn't state your opinion clearly.

I was once told not to believe in advertisements because they are not true

Readers still have no idea which view point you side with.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Aug 15, 2013   #3
I was once told not to believe in advertisements because they are not true.

... This is how I would tell this idea;
I was once told not to have too much faith in advertisements due to the reason that they may not reveal the real picture.

Second, in order to avoid products being left in the stock and not being bought, there are methods such as sale-off programs for many reasons

Secondly, in order to make sure that all the products are being sold, the sellers try many tricks such as ....
Advertisements have always been a tool to stimulate consumption but its overly useoveruse it can lead to serious consequences.


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