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Eight Easy Ways Lead to Success



yurikeyuri 43 / 49  
Dec 2, 2016   #1
There are eight ways to create success in the life according to seven years of research and 500 interviews. First of all is the passion according to Freeman Thomas who talk about passion can bring to the success because do it for love. Secondly, Rupert Murdoach said that the success must do with hard work because nothing comes easily. Thirdly, put the nose down in good something to get the success and practice it, based on Alex Garden's says. Then focus, in Noman Jewison's view who is think all with focusing on one thing. David Gallo. The next, Push the self, particularly physically and mentally, also pass the shyness and self-doubt. Then, Sherwin Nuland talked that the another way which can serve others something of value. The Ideas come from creativity skills according to Bill Gates's speak. Kraus says that persistence is the total one reason for the success which it gotta persist pass failure.

Source : TED

Anna94 47 / 50  
Dec 2, 2016   #2
Hello,

First of all is the passion according to ...
First of all, according to Freeman Thomas who says that passion can bring people to the success by doing it with love

... success must do with hard workHARDWORKING because nothing comes easily.

Thirdly, put the nose down in good something (SOMETHING GOOD ) to get the success ...

The next, Push the self, particularly physically and mentallyin physical and mental , also pass ...

You have to consistent in using tenses, since this talk i'm sure running altogether, but your tenses sometimes 'present simple' and 'past tense'. Those make readers confuse.

Gluck^^~


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