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Elderly people in the British society - bar chart info.


faisalrachmn 5 / 6  
Jun 19, 2016   #1
Percentage of population aged 65 and over

In the bar chart shows the information about UK population prediction in 2035 and compared with 1985. Overall, the population predicted increasing rapidly.

In 1985, average population of UK was about 15 percent. Wales was the highest population among part of UK's countries (about 16%) and Northern Ireland was the lowest (about 12.5%). The England population was about 15 percent and Scotland was about 14 percent.

In the future, in 2035, the bar chart predict the population in the UK will grow rapidly. Wales still going the highest population in 2035 (about 26%) and Northern Ireland is still the lowest too (about 26%) but Northern Ireland get huge changes, the population in Northern Ireland grow about 12 percent. Furthermore, England in the future will get lower than Scotland 22.5 percent and 25 percent respectively.




zakitauhid25 4 / 4  
Jun 19, 2016   #2
Faisal if you are in IELTS writing test you have to make it 150 words or more.
Grahyta24 6 / 12 2  
Jun 19, 2016   #3
Hello Faisal, I think your essay does not reach 150 words and maybe you can explore your sentence more.

Overall, the population predicted increasinge rapidly.

In 1985, average population of UK was about 15 percent% .
... among part of UK's countries (about 16%) and Northern Ireland was the lowest (about 12.5%). --->> maybe next time you should write without any "()" and just write directly :)

In the future,inby 2035, the bar chart predicted the population in the UK will growgrew rapidly. Wales still goingstayed the highest population in 2035 (about 26%) and Northern Ireland is stillstayed as the lowest too (about 26%) but Northern Ireland getgot huge changes, the population in Northern Ireland growgrew about 12 percent% .

Cheer up!!! :D
kurniarahmi 6 / 5 1  
Jun 19, 2016   #4
... population in the UK will grow rapidly. Wales still going the highest population in 2035 (about 26%)After 50 years later, wales still going the highest population over 26% and Northern Ireland is still the lowest too (about 26%) but Northern Ireland get huge changes, the population in Northern Ireland grow about 12 percentand Nothern Ireland is predicted approaching 25% and it is a significant increase from the previous year. Furthermore, England in the future will ...
pujakurniawan19 9 / 16 4  
Jun 19, 2016   #5
Hello Faisalrachmn

In the bar chart shows the information about UK population prediction in 2035 and compared with 1985. Overall, the population predicted increasing rapidly.proportion of the people aged over 64 years old in the United Kingdom. It compare about the percentage in the past (1985) and in the future (2035) in England, Wales, Scotland, Northern Ireland and UK totally.

I hope it helped
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