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The electricity generating design from wind turbine and its best place as location


Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
Writing Task 1 HAL 56 UNIT C

The diagrams illustrate electricity generating design from wind turbine and where it optimum locations. In general, the equipment of wind turbine consists of blades which are made from fiberglass or timber, wind sensor, generator, and computer. Meanwhile, wind turbines able to be placed in the sea, near from housing, and above hill. Wind turbine in the sea not spoiled it landscape.

The process is started when blades are propeled to rotate by wind. Wind sensor read the speed and direction of wind. The Computer receive info from sensor to adjusts blades with wind direction and angle. It makes generator produce 1.5 megawatts electicity output

Two big wind turbines can be placed in the sea and above hill, while the small domestic turbine is placed in the land near from housing. The wind turbines which are placed on the hill and in the sea will get maximum wind strengths. More electricity can be generated from these turbines, each of them produce 1.5 megawatts. Whereas, domestic turbine only able to produce 100 kilowatts output of electricity



akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
Hi Miss Meireza..
These are my thoughts towards your writing. Hopefully, these can finalize yours. Please, meet my notes and review them.


The diagrams illustrate electricity generating design from COMPONENTS OF AN ELECTRICITY GENERATOR KNOWN-WELL AS A wind turbine and where it optimum locations CAN PRODUCE THE ELECTRICITY MAXIMALLY. In general, the equipment of wind turbine consists ...(You should display the detailed information in the body paragraph) OVERALL, IT CAN BE OBVIOUSLY SEEN THAT THE TECHNOLOGY CONSISTS OF FIVE PRIMARY ELEMENTS. Meanwhile MOREOVER, THE wind turbines ARE able to be placed ...

THE Wind turbine in the sea DOES not spoiled it landscape.

... when blades are propeled to rotate PROPELLED by STRENGTH OF THE wind. THE Wind sensor readS the speed and direction of THE wind. The Computer receiveS THAT infoRMATION from THE sensor to adjusts THE blades with THE wind direction and angle. It makes generator produceS 1.5 megawatts OF THE electicity output.

Please, pay attention to VERB AGREEMENT

The wind turbines which are(It should be reduced) placed on the hill ...
More electricity can be generated (...), each of them produceS 1.5 megawatts. Whereas HOWEVER, THE domestic turbine IS only able to (...) output of THE electricity

Trust me, you will show the positive progress if you wanna provide more time to practice more and more.
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