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More electricity are produced using alternative energy resources.


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Oct 22, 2016   #1
Question:

More renewable energy sources are harnessed to generate electricity these days. What are disadvantages and advantages of this trend?


More electricity produced that using for now it comes from alternative energy resources. It has advantage and disadvantage. While the cost from using new energy source will be higher since it is the newest. Beside that it would be many choice for people in the future to use it will lessen the dependance on fossil.

New energy bring the positive way for using but the cost will be more expensive. It is because the equipment and location is uncommon. For instance, geothermal energy in near the mountain is need much money to drill in the location and expertise to do the job because too many risk for finishing. In addition maintain the energy source yet need special equipment that the usage to distribute the energy around the area. It need investation for long term period. It is true that people should earn much money to use the energy.

In the future, people can use new energy and not depend on the fossil energy. It means they would reduce the number of effect from fossil energy such as gas emmitions. For example, survey from Ministry of Mineral and Energy Resources state that 50% of using the Geothermal energy would be decreased the number of pollutions in air. People are more likely to choose the renewable energy since it has many benefit for them.

To conclude, the renewable energy give the positive impact but the cost for using it is more expensive than before. However people have many option for energy using in the future.

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Oct 22, 2016   #2
Hi Andika, at a glance, I immediately notice the lack of linking verbs that should and is a valuable component of a sentence. Lacking such link in your sentence would only mean that your sentence will miss an essential factor in showcasing such idea and in ensuring that your readers are able to perfectly comprehend with your article or writing project.

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Bekuk22 15 / 21 3  
Oct 22, 2016   #3
hello MR dika..
let me give some correction for your writing
i hope my correction can help your writing

1. New energy bring( brings)
2. It is becausethe equipment and location is uncommon(equipment and location are uncommon)
3. geothermal energy in near the mountain is need much money to drill ( need much money to drill)
4.It means ( that) they would (...) such as gas emmitions(emission)

may my corrections are useful for your writing..
i do apologize if i have make mistake in my correction..
thank you...


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