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Elephants from India outnumbered other animals from Asian population

andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 11, 2016   #1
A breakdown of the information about the biggest number in the community of Asian Elephants in several countries between 1997 and 2004 is compared in the bar chart. Overall, except the Cambodia, others nation was decline the proportion of Elephants in 2004. Also, India was by far the highest number of all countries.

India far dominated the proportion of populations both of the years at 9,800 (1997) and 7,500 (2004). This was followed by Myanmar, 5,200 in the early of year and 4,800 in the last of year. In addition, the large gap was seen in the level of India by 2,300 when it came to 2004. Unsurprisingly, Laos still stayed the same of proportion by 1,200 either in the former year or in the latter one.

Turning to the another diverge proportion, Cambodia experienced an incline of number by 100 when it moved to the end of year. Other level of countries performs only a small-scale proportion.

mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 12, 2016   #2
Dear Andika, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

... others nation was declined the proportion of ...

Unsurprisingly, Laos still stayed at the same of proportion ...

....Cambodia experienced an inclined of number by 100 ...

Other level of countries performsperformed only a small-scale proportion.


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