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ENGLISH AND FRENCH LANGUAGE TEACHER IN ONTARIO BASED ON THEIR GRADUATED YEAR - IELTS TASK 1


Riiskacha03 31 / 34 5  
Jan 19, 2016   #1
The explanation about the proportion of English and French language teacher in Ontario based on their graduated year from 2001 to 2007 is described in the line graph. Overall, French language teachers experienced slight rose, while the graph of English Language teachers showed the reverse by immense fell.

In 2001, both language teachers were in similar percentage at around 70% and over. Then, they experienced similar pattern until 2002 by went down to under 60%. However, the graph had 2002 until the rest of the period. In 2003, there was a sharp rose of French language teachers, went up to virtually 70% and kept going up until 2007, when it peaked at around 75%.

In contrast, English language teachers experienced dramatic fell to 40% in 2003. Continued by the rose and down for the following 4-year period. Even though there was a slight up in 2005 at around 45%, the graph of English language teachers show significant dropped until 2007 at just around 27%.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 19, 2016   #2
Riska, the information in your graph is not correct as it does not accurately represent the explanation of what the graph is about. You should have made a representation of the fact that the figures being presented were in relation to the number of teachers being hired to teach the two foreign languages within the period of 2002-2007. This inaccuracy in your opening statement would have had a tremendous impact upon your final essay grade in an actual test. As you are supposed to be writing summaries of factual reports, you must always be sure that all of your information and data presented are accurate. Otherwise, the opening statement will cause you to have a faulty claim in the essay, thus making it a failure in terms of delivering proper and accurate information.

Before I correct the mistakes of your essay, you will need to first, correct the error in your discussion development. It will be useless for me to correct your mistakes or even grade your essay because of the serious problem that your work has. to be fair, I will allow you to revise the essay so that you will stand a better chance of getting a passing grade. I hope you will take this rare opportunity I am offering you. Take advantage of the practice tests while you can.


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