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Explain how the internet is being used successfully by students nowadays.


minhvupt 3 / 2 1  
Jul 18, 2013   #1
It is said that the young generation, especially students, is the group who is always instantly familiar with anything new. For instance, the internet, founded by governments, has a variety of considerable benefits for students which are the reason why it is being widely used nowadays. It is estimated that in 2012, half of the population of the world start using the internet. Student uses it successfully with many different purposes.

Firstly, the internet itself is an unlimited source of information. When student have a need of looking for something related to their studying, it will be the fastest way to receive what they want. As a result, rarely do student borrow book from the library. It had happened in the past not in the modern world. Teachers nowadays often upload files or homework through Facebook, a popular social network, and student just come up and download it. If student had trouble with their lesson, they can ask their teachers through the internet and get the answer very quickly and effectively. Therefore, the internet is a powerful medium in education.

Secondly, as we know, student in the university often live far away from home so that seldom do they return home to see family. People said that humanity greatest desire is to belong and connect. Evidently, once again, the internet shows off its enormous benefit. Yahoo, Skype, Facebook may be considered the significant inventions of the whole times in order that student can easily communicate with their families, friends though they're really far apart. Consequently, distance is no longer a big matter these days thanks for the useful of the internet.

Thirdly, after a hard working day, relaxation will become a demand for individuals and accordingly people have created many applications on the internet. Due to this, student can play online games with their own friends, read news or listen to their favorite music. Using a software called " sopcast ", they can watch TV online in the condition that they cannot afford a TV in the dormitory. However, spending too much times on these, it will lead to disastrous consequences.

In addition, trading online has become a trend of student these days. They are no longer had to go to the far away bookstore or supermarket. Apparently, they seemed to be acquaintance with that way of trading.

In conclusion, it seems the internet is being utilized effectively by students. It has changed life of student dramatically since the last century by providing education, communication and relaxation.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 20, 2013   #2
It is said that the young generation, especially students, is the group whothat is always instantly familiar with anything new.

... this sentence does not come right. I guess what you need to highlight is that children pick things fast because they are too curious.

. For instance, the internet,founded by governments, has a variety of considerable benefits for students which are the reason why it is being widely used nowadays.

.... "founded by government" is wrong. As long as I know the Internet, as a concept, was first heard when a professor attached to University of California sent out a message using some computer network. I guess what you meant there is "funded by government", is it?

Have a look at your prompt - It requires you to talk about the usefulness of the Internet for the students. So, in your introduction you should bring out this fact prominently. Don't go out of topic. Introduce the role of internet and how it's been used by students for their academic work. You do not need to give examples in the introduction.
ldlsky03 8 / 16 2  
Jul 20, 2013   #3
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Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 21, 2013   #4
Secondly, as we know,student in the university often live far away from home so that seldom do they return home to see family

... it should be students

People said that humanity greatest desire is to belong and connect.

.... you need to rephrase this sentence ...it's grammatically wrong;
People love to stay connected with their loved ones.

Evidently, once again, the internet shows off its enormous benefit.

The Internet takes care of keeping connections alive by allowing people to communicate irrespective of geographical barriers.


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