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The external elements have dominated the features of everyone? Characteristics.


yas rose 2 / 11  
May 27, 2011   #1
Topic: Research indicates that the characteristic taht we are born with has much more influence on personality and development that any experiences that may have in our life

my essay

Some people argue that the external elements have dominated the features of everyone that inherits genetically. Regarding this, there is a massive number of theories have been issued thus far. The question is which one of these two factors, nature and nurture, is more effective on forming the character of each person. In this essay, the influence of nurture is far out weights than nature.

There is a speculation that imply, not only genes but also the mental and physical disposition of both genders prior to fertilizing the male`s see into the eggs ensure a crucial influence on characteristics. For instance, it is imperative whether the woman and the man love each other, whether they are using drug or alcohol etc.; however, there is not adequate evidence to support this theory. It has not confirmed for certain yet.

It is undeniable that every one carries the number of genes that has been inherited by their parents; however, statistics have illustrated the environment has the major influence. The examination on several twins who have been raised in various environments reveals the fact that definite effects of nature are refuted. Although the twins had varied many common gens, their upbringing under two divers set of circumstances leading to becoming extremely disparate; moreover, I tend to think that the role of peers, teachers, workplaces as well as education should not be neglected. On the basis of my experience there is a large number of siblings who are significantly different. There is no similarity can be observed on their behavior since they were associated with various people.

In the final analysis, I believe that the influence of nurturing is more major than nature.
Thank you for your attention and helping.
Pleas correct my essay and let me know I which one is correct ?(there is a massive number or there are a massive number?) ( there are a large number of siblings or there is a large number of siblings?)

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
May 29, 2011   #2
Regarding this, there is a massive number of theories have been issued thus far.

There is a speculation that not only genes but also the mental and physical dispositions of both genders prior to...---I made some small changes here.

For instance, some imperative consequential circumstances include: whether the woman and the man love each other, whether they are using drugs or alcohol, etc.; however, there is not adequate evidence to support this theory.

One word: everyone

There is a massive number of siblings. ---This is the correct way. However, it is a strange situation. Many people would write this:
There are a massive number of siblings.---This is incorrect, but it is not a big mistake. "number" is singular, so it is supposed to go with "is." But it is no big deal! :-)

It's the same for "large."
OP yas rose 2 / 11  
May 31, 2011   #3
I really appriciate your attention,I was about to be disappointed that no one won`t correc my essay.Thank you very much indeed
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 1, 2011   #4
Rose, you give such great help to other essayists... I think you deserve all the help we can give. Sometimes it takes a few days to get a response, though.

;-)
OP yas rose 2 / 11  
Jun 5, 2011   #5
Kevin,I appriciate that you pay attention.Thank you so much indeed.I`m more motivated and so amazed aswell that not only my essays won`t be neglected but also it is examined like this.you realy made my day;).thank you.\


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