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IELTS TASK 2: What factors are important in achieving happiness?Depend on individuals



nancy07 3 / 5  
Jul 18, 2013   #1
TOPIC: Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Happiness is something that is indispensable to human's life. Actually, life will become meaningless without happiness. However, it's not easy to define what happiness is and how to be happy.

Everyone in the world is always different from one another. They differ from shape, personality, hobby, thinking and many other things. Certainly, their happiness is also dissimilar. For example, when a person who lives in indigence and often eats frugal meals or even has nothing to eat is feasted with a hearty meal and is granted a little money, he might feel very happy. Wealthy people, by contrast, cannot be happy by those things. Maybe, to them, things can make them happy are a colossal amount of money, luxury cars, respect or even just care. Who knows? We cannot explain someone's happiness but himself. Therefore, I would believe that everybody has his own happiness's definition.

On the other hand, there are various things to make somebody happy. In fact, depending on different conditions, we have different methods to reach happiness. Nevertheless, in my opinion, the most essential factor which makes a person feel happy is having positive outlook on life. We have to confront many difficulties throughout our life. If we just look at the negative side with pessimistic attitude, I make sure that we never know how happiness is. Moreover, I believe that we should understand ourselves in order that we know which really make us feel happy.

In conclusion, life is complicated, and happiness is no exception. In my point of view, looking at the bright side or having positive outlook on life is the key point to achieve happiness.

bepe5n 2 / 8  
Jul 18, 2013   #2
Life is itself the source of happiness
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 18, 2013   #3
Good start. Only I wish you change part of this sentence;

However, it's not easy to define what happiness is and how to be happy.

Your prompt asks you to discuss the factors that contribute to happiness. So you better align the latter part with the prompt;
However it is not easy to define what happiness is and what factors exactly make one happy.
You can write well, but try to keep your writing aligned with what your prompt suggests. Also you should post these essays into writing feedback forum.
mahgh123 5 / 14  
Jul 19, 2013   #4
If we just look at the negative side with pessimistic attitude, I make sure that we never know how happiness is

...We will never know .... because of if clause.
Shumaila86 11 / 31  
Jul 19, 2013   #5
is always different from one another

no use of 'always' here.

They differ from shape,

i wud have loved if you used' they differ with appearances, personality, thinking...

Who knows? We cannot explain someone's happiness but himself. Therefore, I would believe that everybody has his own happiness's definition.

try to avoid giving your opinion using 'I. We, You except when its is necessary in intro and conclusion. and also do not use informal language like .who knows'.


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