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IELTS- factors for teenagers to commit a crime



Slim shady 12 / 25  
Jun 28, 2012   #1
(please check and let me know band score)

Resent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As globalization booming, the bad effects of it also increasing. For example, committing crime among the youth. The statistics show an increase in teenage crime, especially who are under the age of 18. Most psychologists believe that getting insufficient social and emotional learning which needed for children from parents and teachers is one of the main reason for violent crime.

From my point of view, nowadays the amount of crime which committed by teenagers is rising significantly. For instance, burglary, killing people, stealing car or money. In fact, many children are so rebellious now and it makes difficult to exercise them. I completely agree that a lack of social and emotional learning contribute to the problem, also there are other factors which surely proved: economic status, for example. If a teenager comes from a poor family and they live in low-quality housing, this is confirmed to affect the child and he\she is more likely to commit a crime.

Moreover, I believe that friendship between teenagers have more influence on them than their parents and teachers. At that age, people want to be a part of a group or even a gang when they are in their teens this might led to breaking law in a number of ways. In my opinion, parents and teachers should give them more useful activities to carry out and make them on the go.

In conclusion, while I concur with the statement above, I also think that it is not the only factor. There are many things which can be one of the basic factors for teenagers to commit a crime.

mppaniz 3 / 6  
Jun 28, 2012   #2
I suppose you need some brainstorm ideas and some how you repeating yourself.
your opening sentence is not related to the topic.
For example you could talk about disfunctional families and divorce,... or you could talk about teachers and students relationship.
deepakbaniya 3 / 91  
Jun 28, 2012   #3
so rebellious now and it makes difficult to exercise them
difficult to teach moral to them.
chessman567 5 / 168  
Jun 28, 2012   #4
What is the maximum score for the IELTS? If you can tell me, then I will be able to give you a band score. I would give it a 85 out of 100
OP Slim shady 12 / 25  
Jun 29, 2012   #5
maxsimum band score in the IELTS is 9. and thanks everybody for comments.


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