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Family life these days has been affected by the hectic lives people lead.



isabellaclaudia 14 / 30  
Sep 6, 2011   #1
In this fast-paced society that we live in today, we are all caught up in the hustle and bustle of life. Working adults are kept under deadlines to meet, urgent meetings and numerous appointments. Similarly, students are forced to juggle with various tasks at hand ranging from studies, CCAs, homeworks, and relationships simultaneously. As each of us are adopting a rather hectic lifestyle to cope with these challenges, we have brought detrimental social problems to our homes and lives. The alarming increase in the number of divorces, broken homes, and juvenile delinquency is a testament of how our lifestyles have affected our family life today.

First and foremost, the hectic lifestyle that we adopted have disrupted the work life balance, and many social ills have arisen as a result. With a heavy workload, working parents has to spend more time in the office with their pile of work rather than

at home with their family. This has led to a lack of communication among the family members and affected family relationships adversely. Misunderstandings and arguments are bound to happen which become the cause of divorces and broken homes.

From the time immemorial, parents hold the role of caretakers for the future generation. They are responsible for instilling moral values and life skills essential for a child development. However, the fast paced lifestyle that we adopted has prevented parents to do so as demands from work has taken away parents from their children. In a bustling city, especially in Singapore, a growing number of parents are passing over their responsibility to educate their children to caregivers or elders. This may cause children to experience a lack of affection and attention from their parents and inadvertently result in recalcitrant behaviour. Such misdemeanour may actually be the cries from teenagers seeking for attention and affection from their parents. However, parents often see them in different light: as an rebellious act which should be punished accordingly. It is heartbreaking to observe the condition of many families being torn apart .

As it has been said,'the family is a haven in this heartless world, parents as well as children should be constantly reminded of the importance of their family. Spending more time with family members should be the foremost in our minds rather than bread-and-butter issues. Only then can we create a harmonious and united family units in our society.

Scientiana 12 / 42  
Sep 6, 2011   #2
Your essay is excellent. There are only a few mistakes.

From the time immemorial, parents hold the role of caretakers for the future generation. They are responsible for instilling moral values and life skills, which are essential for a child development. However, the fast paced lifestyle that we are adopting has prevented parents to do so as demands from work has taken away parents from their children.


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