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'Famous park in Sanadaj' - Describe your last summer holiday


blackklightt 1 / 1  
Aug 30, 2012   #1
hi all.
could you correct my sentence please ?

Last summer my friends and i decided to went to our friend's house in Sanandaj. We start my trip in the afternoon and came at night.

after having dinner we slept and got up late in the morning.
On the first day we got around the city and enjoyed.
On the second day we drove to Oraman. Oraman is a zone in the Iran. we ate very Delicious lunch in the Kamale. Kamale is a village before Oraman Takt. after see Oraman we went to Marivan. Marivan is a border city. There is a very beautiful lake in Marivan that called Zarivar.

On the third day we went to Abidat. Abidar is a famous park in the Sanandaj

Thanks a lot for corrections

amitt - / 80  
Aug 30, 2012   #2
You gulped basic necessity
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Aug 30, 2012   #3
Last summer my friends and i decided to wenttravel to one of our mutual friend's

in Sanandaj

It would be better to explain that this city is located in which province of Iran as a non-defining clause.

We startedmy tripour journey from xxx (Place) at xx(Time)in the afternoon and arrived there at xxx (Time)came at night .

On the first day we got around the city and enjoyed.

What places did you visit? How did you enjoy? What did you do through the trip?

Oraman is a zone in the Iran

---> suggestion :"Oraman is a mountainous region located in xxxx"

we ate very d elicious lunch in the Kamale, where . Kamale is a lovelyvillage xxx km away from Oramanbefore Oraman Takt . We continued our journey towardafter see Oraman we went to Marivan,Marivan is a border city near Iran-Iraq border region . There iswas a very beautiful lake in Marivan that called Zarivar, (Give some information about the lake. What did you do there?) .
On the third day we went to Abidat. Abidar is a famous park in the Sanandaj (why is it famous? What did you see at the park? Why do you still remember it?
amitt - / 80  
Aug 30, 2012   #4
Thanks ah_zafari. You have some study material for me?
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Aug 30, 2012   #5
You have some study material for me?

Hi Amit, as I told you before, all the materials I have are hard copies and I cannot send them to you. I wish I could but it is impossible :((
OP blackklightt 1 / 1  
Aug 30, 2012   #6
thanks a lot ahmad for correction :-)


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