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IELTS; The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession


fahadbd 25 / 56 5  
Aug 24, 2013   #1
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Since few years, due to the increase of popularity of sports, sports profession has prompted an emotional response among the fans. Today, undoubtedly, professionalists income is likely to be greater than before. Especially, first-class professional sports athlete is to be more earning than any other profession like teachers, doctors, lawyers and social workers. However, the argument in which I agree with the statement mentioned, will be discussed below.

The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession. Their earning may be greater in the comparison of distinguished people like a minister, lower and so on. An athlete is famous and popular in both native country as well as worldwide. They are often offered in order of their outstanding contribution in the sports area. They are valued and awarded a huge sum of money when they show excellent performance in the field. The highest paid salary in each sport is much higher, beside of official salary, they have endorsements, appearance fees, sponsorship money and other sources of extra income. For example, in my country, the national cricketer captain Shakib Al Hasan is called to create an advertisement for, which lies in on caleldar, TV screen.

There are a number of players in the sports professional enjoy a lot of facilities . In many areas they are allowed in free of cost. For example, a national athlete often are given free cars and accomodation by the government. Some companies allow them free-facilities. Due to the technology they are being more and more popular. They are well-known to the people and saluted. In contrast, other professionals are bound under their locality.

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Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Aug 25, 2013   #2
Hmmmmm....Just a quick observation.Have you missed posting the conclusion? According to the Task 2 essay structure the conclusion should be given at the end of the essay though you have stated at the starting. Hope this helps. : )
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Sep 11, 2013   #3
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

I guess this is an Agree / Disagree essay. If so, you need to state your opinion before concluding your introduction.

professionalists income

income of the professionals
Your body paragraphs should dicuss the reasons for your opinion.Also you need to support your reasons with specific examples.
I am a bit confused with your essay structure :(

The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession.

The famous sports professionls earn lots money in their respective field of sport.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Sep 20, 2013   #4
There are a number of players in the sportsprofessional profession enjoy a lot of facilities

Sports professionals enjoy many other facilities in addition to their lucrative income levels.

In many areas they are allowed in free of cost.

They enjoy tax reliefs, various forms of sponsorship, free entertainment facilities .... you can list down a few what they get as perks just because they are celebrities. And then tell, all these have a monetary value to align your reasoning with the prompt.


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