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FAST FOOD has many good effects on population?


chucnt 6 / 18  
Jul 4, 2012   #1
The number of fast food restaurants has increased over the last few years. Some people are very anxious about this increase. What is your opinion of fast food restaurant and thier effects on the population? Give your reasons or examples to support your ideas."

The number of fast food restaurants has increased quickly, which makes some people very anxious because of some harmful effects on health fast food may have. However the increase has many good influences on population. In my opinion, I'm sided with these positive attitudes toward fast food and fast food restaurant

One of the main benefits associated with the increase is that the more fast food restaurants are opened that is why more time and money people can save. In the past when there were not many restaurants those who wanted to buy fast food had to go to a very far place, which took so much time. Moreover buying fast food easily also helps people not have to cook - a really time-consuming work. As the result we can have more time to do many more useful things. For example you may have weekends without worrying about work, have more time for family, friends, relatives.

Another positive influence of the increase in the number of fast food restaurants on population is that it motivates economic development. When more and more these restaurants are opened, many people will have another chance to have jobs, which results to that unemployment's consequence can be reduced. Take KFC for example, they have more than 14000 outlets in more than 80 countries and territories around the world hiring millions labours. Moreover, the increase in the number of fast food restaurants also creates a huge demand for materials for production, which is the dynamic for other factors of the economy to develop quickly.

However, many people are anxious that being able to get fast food very easily for the number of restaurants increases makes people become lazier and indifferent of slow food. As the result, they have to face to the manner of seriously bad healthy. In my opinion, the consequence is not caused by fast food. The most important reason is people's reaction to the "plus" time. When people have more free time, they don't spend it on useful and healthy things: instead of exercising or joining outdoor activities, people watch television or play video game for many hours or even just sleep.

What has been discussed above has my point of view that the increase in the number of fast food restaurant has many good effects on population. Moreover we should encourage developing this field of business because it is not only business but also special cuisines.
sally awada 1 / 6  
Jul 4, 2012   #2
u should watch out for some punctuation: fast food restaurants .

Otherwise, the essay is good, but u can enter more examples; the more examples u used, the more realistic u'r essay will be.
:)
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jul 4, 2012   #3
The number of fast food restaurants has increased

Do not copy the topic

because of some harmful effects that fast foods may have on health fast food may have

However thethis ascending trend in the number of such restaurantsincrease has many good influences on population. In my opinion, I'm(do not use contractions) sided with these positive attitudes toward fast foods and fast food restaurants. (It would be better to add the reasons why u have a positive attitude toward fast food. Just write the reasons through several words)

One of the main benefits associated with the increase (in what?) is that people can save more money and time asthe more fast food restaurants are opened that is why more time and money people can save

What has been discussed above has my point of view that the increase in the number of fast food restaurant has many good effects on population. Moreover we should encourage developing this field of business because it is not only business but also special cuisines.

U do not need to use the statement "What has been discussed above has my point of view that" in the conclusion. Firstly, you should reword the topic or the introduction and then write a clincher (ending statement).

Regards
Ahmad
bsm_25 3 / 5  
Jul 4, 2012   #4
your grammar is quite good, but you also have a bit mistakes, such as' ...a really time-consuming' or '... to do many more useful things'. ... and you use lots of complex phrase, which is not suitable.
pintianz 7 / 15  
Jul 4, 2012   #5
bsm has a good point, try to reduce the amount of adverb you have, it would mke the flow much more smoother and easier to read
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 5, 2012   #6
I'm sided within favor of these positive attitudes toward fast food and fast food restaurant

Though not grammatically incorrect, I am not favor of the usage of "sided" ... LOL

One of the main benefits associated with the increase is that the more fast food restaurants are opened that is whythe more time and money people can save.

Moreover,buying fast food easily also helps people not have tosave time on cooking - a really time-consuming work.activity

hahahaha... u seem to be a very lazy guy :D
hell - / 1  
Jul 5, 2012   #7
Food trend has been popular for some decades. Everybody wants to have hygienic as a launch or dinner. Today people are busy that is why they can't make their food at

home so that they have to go at restaurants for food. Today many people are suffering from diabetes, stomach problem because of having food at restaurants. That is why i prefer to make food at home to be healthy, save money, keep in touch with my family member and enjoying.

First, having food at home is a key for being healthy. We can make hygienic food if we cooked at home. If somebody was suffered from diabetes problem he could make food at home by adding least ingredient in food.

Second, we don't have to paid money for restaurant if we cooked food at home. We have to paid more that our expectation for restaurants which one could be made at home in few budget. If we could save money by cooking at home would be helped to invest on our children's education.

Third, in this globalized era people are spending hectic life. They don't have much time to spend with their family. In this situation home cooked plays a essential role to contact with family. similarly, cooking at home with help by family member would be really fun.

In conclusion, because of having food trend in restaurants people are suffering from diabetes and stomach problem that is why i prefer to make food to be healthy, save money and contact with family member.
OP chucnt 6 / 18  
Jul 5, 2012   #8
ahmad :I didnt copy the topic.i have rewritten it in another point :) thanks for your advices
OP chucnt 6 / 18  
Jul 6, 2012   #9
nepali babu! that is a good point too! please check again for :
we don't have to paid ( have to pay )

cooking at home with help by family member would be really fun.(by help of sb )


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